The Crimson Ripper

It is great read. However the girl doesn’t help the male Mc much and he is weaker than his girlfriend. I personally don’t like that but you should still give it a read and decide for yourself.

There are a couple of things that don't make sense... the mc shouldn't be that fat...He bikes to university every day and because he is at university he wouldn't spend anything on takeouts or tons of junk food to save money. It was also mentioned he didn't spend money like water and always saved what he earned. Boosting the fact that this makes little sense...To me, it just feels like you made him like that as a joke to try and make it funny. Leading to this being extremely forced...I'm not trying to hate, I'm just stating the fact that it just doesn't make sense giving the background you bought him upon. I also feel like him being a "chubby" elf is going to be a reoccurring joke throughout until he slims down from the training.For me, this is just going to annoy tf outta me as I will always think back to this and how it was forced anyway leading to all mentions of it just annoying me more each time. If that makes sense?I hope this doesn't happen constantly with the forced try at humour as it would be extremely disappointing. If you want humour it will flow naturally in the story. There is no need to force it as it will just bring down the story as a whole. Oh, another thing is his chosen name. Like wtf? Who cares what it means in Chinese? He is an elf... chose an elf name. His own name Eldrian? Is more fcking elfy than Haru...  If he was a human I wouldn't mind him having the name Haru but he is not. He is an elf... It's like the mc is a dragon and calling it Haru. It doesn't fit at all. The immersive feel of the book is again compromised by doing this. I am assuming the Author is chinses? Again this is not hate so don't take it as that. It's just you are writing about an elf so why give it a human name? That sort of thing. So far it isn't looking like a great book but I haven't read a lot yet. I will read further and change the review depending on how it reads later.

definitely did not get hooked by the cover.. yep definitely not..i umm.. got hooked by the synopsis hmm yes the synopsis..what a beautiful synopsis, those beautiful curves.. what a great cursive font, and wow! those huge round... bold letters, they look very bree.. readable *cough* *cough*

It's a good story so far.  The story development is interesting, as is the character design and world background.  The main character has a good head on his shoulders, and seems to have real life abilities that he can transfer into the game.  Good job.

This is a new novel and people will not remove their reviews of the last novel. Love the book and thought I should let you enjoy it too. Just leave a comment or a review of how much you like or dislike the book and I will most likly answer.

an interesting book, I most like the main character who is a bit childish and cute.I hope he'll turn into a child again, it would be facenating

Gambit of the Living Weapon is a book of fiction by Breno_Ranyere. Personally, I love the main character and the fact the weapon the protagonist has is a crossbow rather than some enchanting sword or anything similar to this. The other characters are lovable, one that would make readers remember their name even if the book is finished.I've two major flaws that I've found while reading this book, scenes and punctuation. i'm not going to judge your grammar anymore since it's good. The basic principles and fundamentals, I could see that they're followed. Alright, the scenes! When it comes to this part, there were times when my excitement was building up then suddenly the action ends right away. It's a bit too fast if you were to ask me. As for the emotions, I would suggest that you add more feelings rather than using adjectives but don't overdo them. For the descriptions, the best advice I could give you is to add more emotions and actions to prolong it. I will give an example:Quietude succumbed to his mind, draining every emotion. Yes, descriptive, but we could add more emotions and descriptions to this."Once the quietness arrived, it stayed and spread in Estha. It reached out of his head and enfolded him in its swampy arms…sent its stealthy, suckered tentacles inching along the insides of his skull, hoovering the knolls and dells of his memory, dislodging old sentences, whisking them off the tip of his tongue"A little warning though, only use it during important scenes such as the action because too much will consider your book as "overdescriptive"Next, the punctuation. Punctuation is one thing authors must learn about since it helps when it comes to telling the readers when to pause or how to read that particular sentence. Try reading these sentences:As promised I will give back your money. As promised, I will give back your money.The second sentence has a comma! When one would read the first, they would go straight out without pausing. When one would read the second, there would be a slight pause after the word promise. I know learning punctuation is a difficult task, trust me, I've been there. If I can, you can too! I'll be rooting for you! Overall, it's great! All the author has to improve on is his punctuation and scenes.

"Dunno!" He said, "They went out for a while to spend time together until dawn, they left me sweets and goodies to eat though while they're gone!" He said, bubbly and cheery as always.