The Clash In Eldoria

So are we just going to copy and paste ‘sign-in buddha’s palm’?! If so I already read it. Not quite sure what’s going on here, but am looking forward to reading the comments. *grabs popcorn*

You have such a good premise to work on. Your idea is brilliant but your story writing lacks alot of things. Also, please dont follow the pattern of chinese authors to stack in more words and make more chapters. A shorter story would be better if it is relevant. Also, the the modern world isn't as savage as the ancient one he came from. That is all well and good if it was in an ancient chinese world, but if you are writing about the modern world, make it so that the people act like modern people do. Now we do have a lot of assholes around but there are good people around too. Killing someone isn't that common and it isn't condoned either. Also, please don't mind my criticism. This is my first time telling an author my point of view and even that is because I am absolutely in love with idea you have put forth and I wish to read something extremely good rather than something mediocre.

"I asked you a question, you shall answer it...!" Izan spoke in a very deep voice as he glared into Voldemort's eyes. "What is the goal of your master – Vaal Van Denio?" And as Izan was speaking, he was letting out his Conqueror's Haki, Izan has finished acting gentle now.  

Without removing his smirk off his face, he said, "And yet, I'm letting one go."

The tail was also black at its end with a spiral pattern going around the tail before meeting up with the spinal black part

What do I mean?Well,I have reincarnated 88 times already,and thus have received 89 names.

On the other line was heard a loud laugh. Luke was laughing non stop.

"what are you saying, you both got closer