Reincarnation of a Scientist

Hello guys I'm DenseMc13, this is the first novel I'm writing and I hope you support me and continue reading the Adventures of a reincarnated Scientist in an ancient Wuxia world

Bad.

MC is supposed to be an accomplished scientist, his age should be around 30-40. Yet he behaves like a child, talks like a child, and think like a child.

The addition of an A.I. system is terrible. He is a scientist, his job is to figure **** out.

He could have examined/researched cultivation in a modern mans perspective, is it physical? Magical? Why are there so many variations? Is there a common denominator between all cultivation techniques? Why can the same energy produce different colors and shapes based on cognition? Whats up with all this dao comprehension profound bull****, why dont they make it specific with proper explanations?

The author threw all of that potential and just slapped an A.I. to MC.

*sigh.

MCs background should be re-written. "Stupid NEET gets killed by TRUCK-san, wakes up in a cultivation world with super A.I. to do all the work for him."

This story is really good. The progress is going good.. Author has done good work explaining relationship between characters. The MC is Op and the update stability is the best. Author keep up the good work and let the chapters rolling.

Tl:DR "meh". Solid C-.

Let me preface this review by stating the obvious: "THIS NOVEL DESPERATELY NEEDS AN EDITOR". now that that is out of the way I will continue.

The bad: poor grammar, poor capitalisation / punctuation (often none, at all) and comically long run on sentences (I think I saw one paragraph long sentence with 6 "and"s in it back around chapter 10). The author is overly reliant on Autocowrong and it shows. How the novel flows would suggest that the author is not a native English speaker, and if that is the case then kudos for your effort friend, but you need an editor.

There is a gaming term called Ludonarrative Dissonance, which describes the disconnect between a games narrative (the story) and the gameplay. In this work the author creates a similar dissonance by introducing a "genius scientist" which is overly reliant on his system and fails to have a single original thought. The overly ****** dialogue compounds this. It is hard to convince readers that your MC is a genius when he speaks in either short and choppy or long run on sentences.

The meh: what could be fantastic fight chapters and power gains are glossed over instead of expanded on. The lack of detail transforms the elements which this genre typically does best into fluff; glossed over and quickly forgotten.

The good: all the things which make this genre great are present; there is a solid foundation to build on.

Closing thoughts: please, please... find an editor.

Super rod in Quality I'll have to character development and their relationships between all of the characters I think there needs to be more information about where they come from hope I hope to see more updates and thanks for the writing

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What is going on with the pacing...
Also, him being a scientist have 0 relevance to the development of the story after rebirth. For someone that was betrayed by someone he loved and saw his entire colleague die with him, his actions seem too carefree and thoughtless.
It's a typical facesmacking and admired type protagonist.

It lacks thrilling moments and schemes which i like most... But the story is promising i just feel it lacks something more.... I just read it from early stage but lets read for more updates to know how the story develops