Les felt common sense was abandoning her, she melted into his arms as he scooped her gently in his arms and sat on the couch with her on his lap. He was trying really hard to control his member who felt like exploding right there and then. she was too important for him to jump into that part of intimacy.
I will be completely honest with my opinion -:1) system is useless(you will know if you read till chapter 20) . 2) story starts with a high node with basic information about world to understand MC circumstances along with dangers around him and just when you gets excited to see how MC will escape *boom* your MC is gone. 3) Suddenly we are reading about a boy then a girl about whom we don't know(I understand author that he wants to bring suspense but it just kills the attachment with MC) .4) the story got messy the movement another mc(in game) gets his memories.#this is a story which requires at least above 1000 chapters to fill plot hole, so I will come back after at least 300 chapters.
This is good stuff, the story and characters are interesting enough. The only gripe I have is the insane use of 'Yoda' tongue, which is pretty funny on occasion but it also butchers some sentences mis narration.While the characters definitely do not belong to cliche troupes, their behaviour could be more assertive which would have given reason to reveal the world building with more solid information.
Hey dear author Your book resonated deeply with me, and I'm convinced it can inspire many more readers. I'd love to share some ideas on how to expand its reach and amplify its impact.May I have the privilege of discussing my thoughts with you?
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