Passion Twist : Tales of Lost Sisters

thank you.  Hunter and Abigail,  Rafael and Emeralds stories were wonderful.

A perfectly nice novel idea ruined, trash plots story not making sense most of the time chapters contradicting previous chapters. MC is really stupid and brain dead and other people have this system before him. They can walk around with guns in the city amd no one says anything no secrecy at all but no one talks about it the story is messed up cant stress the word enough literally a waste of time to read this couldn’t even go over 10chapters

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The flow of the  story is really good. The plot is interesting. The idea of hiring the stray pets as neighborhood watchers is brilliant. I hope this story will be picked and get published soon.

This novel is bad, not because the writing, the grammar or even the world background. The MC is way too OP, but that can be a feature, the system rewards and weapon stats are stupidly simple, mostly because it is a linear increase. The MC has no reason to increase his skill or produce more powerfull weapons. He could literally mass produce the most inferior kind and grow faster than he does in the story.You might be used to these kinds of errors in web novels and you would be right to argue that a good story can stand above such trivialities. You might even be right.The problem is, this story has one of the worst character designs I have ever seen, even some harem novels have side characters with better design. I am used to the usual Goddess with amazing talent, skill, wealth etc. falling in love with the seemingly useless trash MC. It is badly done here, but alright. The catastrophe starts with the fact that the MC sleeps with her, fights the major forces of his hometown for her, risks himself and his masters/adoptive fathers smithy, supports her clan and then decides to leave her behind. It is not like he is in danger, needs something to grow stronger or a friend or family member is in danger. He just doesn't seem to care anymore, he literally wasted 3 years trying to forge, but after his first success at making a 3 tier weapon he loses interest. His love, his masters legacy , the war inside the city just do not matter anymore. It is not like he is a pervert, scumbag or an evil character. He is just flat. The author decided the MC needed to change character and wasn't interested in making up a reason.The other characters are also flat and inconsequential, so it is not like there is anything to look forward to.2nd of 5 new novels that is trash.

Lin family again ok very cool but, what's with the so many 'Please become the laziest god ever' systems? do nothing but obtain a lot of different stuff, getting tired of them.

Este fanfic es una joya para los fans .La autora/autor logra capturar la esencia de los personajes y crear una trama [emocionante/intrigante/conmovedora] que te mantendrá enganchado desde la primera página. Los detalles cuidados y la fluidez de la escritura hacen que sea difícil dejar de leer. Si eres fan de [menciona la saga o universo], ¡no te puedes perder esta historia!

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