The grammar and typos make this a slightly annoying read. The nicknames are cringe. The FL isn’t really my cup of tea in terms of her behavior. Admittedly, I did drop this book early because I was just unable to get into it, so I don’t know if the story gets better.
great writing but the plot and MC development doesn't add up. Sorry Author but you made a smart but dumb mc.. has knowledge of the future but doesn't apply it nor can he figure out basic logic. Great concept but very poorly executed.
The standouts for me were the character descriptions, the MC's outlook (dry, sarcastic, blunt -- my bread and butter) and the setting. Clemen's description rips. I'm instantly intrigued with the introduction and again at the conclusion. There's just enough told to maintain interest; no agonizing over speed bumps or minute detail, rather, it feels like a well-paced unraveling of important pieces that doesn't overdo itself and never overstays its welcome. 'Course it's only one chapter though so hopefully it keeps up.
What I have gathered from reading this first few chapters is as follows. The writing quality is quite high and the story development is extremely strong. However, as is the case with most original novels on Qidian, the story flows too fast, not leaving enough time for the reader to take it all in through the large paragraphs of information. Hence I suggest making your paragraphs smaller. The character design could use a little improvement, mainly in the sense of increasing the back stories of the various characters . But the world background is also quite good and fairly fleshed out. Good job if this is your first novel, I'll be favouriting this one.
It was a really good story and i am eagerly waiting for the next part to come as soon as possible and just keep it up like this writing good stories which make a really good time pass
Well, I saw some good reviews on here so I decided to binge read the first 52 chapters. I stopped at 52 because I just seriously can’t take the bad grammar, the bizarre transitions from a past timeline from a new character from the future (that isn’t the Mc), and the bizarre use of side stories in other parts of the world that are clearly irrelevant for the short-medium term. I personally just want to follow the MC’s story since his whole setup seems cool and the route he can go is neat but it feels ruined by the side characters on other parts of the world. You’ve also got random yaoi stuff in it at parts and it’s just strange and out of place. I couldn’t care less about the other top tankers in the world, like just stick to the Mc. Idk, the story keeps going for another 300+ chapters so maybe it’s improved but man I just can’t read anymore. The bad grammar and the transition with no notice to a future/past timeline thing is so jarring. Especially when you don’t know who is talking at times. Sometimes Loki just says Prince over and over and it’s like, “Oh he means the MC. Why isn’t he even saying his name or saying Lord Shadow or Shadow?” It’s so confusing. Don’t waste your time tbh.
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