webnovel needs to sort out its trial reading as this is annoying I want the updates we are owed and I want them now, they should stope changing how they do things
I know it’s a bit early on to give a review so I’m giving it a medium review which I hope is ok don’t want to be harsh love seeing fellow new writers but I see myself so much of myself in your writing style and personal wanted to give you something to be able to reflect on and some motivation to write I will read your story and I will be waiting to see if you to continue I have also commented on your chapters as well saying similar things but i wish to repeat in more detail.Good things1.You have the idea always important 2.you have ok grammar could use a little improvement but that’s fine we’re not professional writersThings you could improve1.Context matters build up a description of your character, new family, new world, compare2.cultivation isn’t everything as I feel a problem all novels especially young one who set themselves these massive cultivation realms with fancy words is they often have no meaning to a reader there just word so try and help the audience gain insight on what they mean and how strong each realm is don’t go into to much detail3.personally don’t like first person too much and I think you would find it easier to write in the 3rd (my opinion lol)Please continue to write I will read!!!Shameless promotion time Checkout blind saint as I’m currently writing it it’s not great but I think you might be good for you to read a style of writing that’s the opposite of your own
Is this a fan fic? I made this review not becuase I wanted to give you 5 stars I just wanted to see if it was a fan fiction novel inspired by "i'm really a Superstar" btw all that crap was because of the 140 comment crap thing
A few chapters of this book and I love it so much keep up the good work, I don't really like "system" before but book has made me to.Yours faithfully kaiga_providence.
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