Memoir of Llyris mordane

wow.... what a nice book. the story line got me hooked. can't wait to see what happens next. kuddos to the author

Trash novel. Just one example: the MC is at one point the top martial artist in the world, capable of killing other top martial artists with a wave, stepping in to the sky, taking sword strikes to his body without them leaving a mark, killing werewolves with a single punch, destroying entire military squadrons with missiles and helicopters in moments on his own, typical OP cultivation level powers ... then 100 chapters later he's fighting with ordinary security guards while thinking proudly that his body is strong enough to fight 6 regular people. At some point the author completely forgot that the MC has these magical OP powers and now he's just really good at fighting. Embarassing. Another example: at one point, the MC encounters a man who is road raging at him. A crowd gathers as the guy rages and threatens the MC. The MC slams into him, killing him in plain view of the gathered crowd, then causally drives away to go shopping. This incident is never mentioned again past the end of that chapter: in the next chapter we're on to jade gambling with no mention of the prior events. The MC doesn't think about it, the woman with him doesn't say anything or have any reaction, and the cops never investigate the killing. This novel is trash.

I am the bone of my XP Grinding is my body Spamming is my blood I have written countless messages Unknown to Trolls Nor known to Mods Have withstood countless aching joints but my fingers just can't stop ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) So as I pray UNLIMITED EXP WORKS!!

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Overall your system story is very solid. Capable MC, no plot holes, overall grammar quality was fine too in terms of comprehending the story. You already have some experience as a writer so I won't nitpick the small details. I still recommend polishing the earlier chapters, especially parts with the run-ons since it's still a slight turn off for experienced readers. The early chapters are what hooks readers in, and you don't want to wait till your later chapters where quality drastically increases.Now to the crux of the stuff I feel like you could work on. Nothing major, but these are suggestions to think of. In MC's previous life, where he has his monologue in regards to his family begging him for money and whatnot. I'm not sure if you'd ever elaborate on his previous life further, but I personally felt a bit diappointed we weren't able to be much more of MC's personality. For example, Jobless Reincarnation features a similar start in terms of a NEET, but we get to see more on how he is ostracized by his peers and whatnot, giving us sympathy for the character and can relate to the the MC's trauma, hence a higher connection to said character. Comparing this to Jiang Ming, I just feel that his character is almost too perfect when he reincarnates. Nothing from his old life really influences him or anything, and he just seems to be all out op (and he does deserve to be so being in a game in which he's the number 1 player), with no real setbacks. Everything just seems to go his way no matter what to his benefit, and although this can be enjoyable to read for a new reader, in the long run it would become stale. I hope in the future chapters there will be stuff that has real stakes; real penalties for when he fails and they have to be situations where he isn't confident in himself to succeed. This way, not only will his character be more human-like and relatable, it'll also path away from the Gary Stu route.Another thing I wish to sort of point out is his relationship with his aunt. I understand how the relationship develops, but in a way it also feels too synthetic in how quickly she's willing to be in a relationship with her nephew. Perhaps it progresses too quickly for my tastes, and I know that this appeals to a percentage of readers, so this is slightly nitpicky. Overall, in terms of dialogue and interaction, I feel there is no issue. It's just specifically on this relationship that suddenly seems like both characters are ok with it, even though it's written in a fairly conservative setting. From mother to aunt to lover, the progression just feels so fast. Not only that, I haven't understood Kong Ming and his aunt's relationship clearly. This is more or less a suggestion and my thoughts. I like the system established, as it is very progressive and makes sense to follow along. Introducing it later was a good twist. Dialogue and Chinese traits felt authentic enough, and your formatting has been easy to read and follow. Physical descriptions were present for most characters (although it focused to the women mostly), so I would've liked to see some of the unimportant/throwaway side characters have some more descriptions too in order to paint a more vivid image. Adding some personality to them would also bring the quality up a notch, showing that they're not just the stereotypical trope and are driven by other hidden motivations. Nevertheless, I hope you are able to write a compelling villain for the main character to overcome. Tldr, your weaknesses mostly lie in small mistakes from your early chapters, and I wouldn't recommend ignoring them as experienced readers might find them off putting. Your book is a solid cultivation system novel overall, but there are definitely parts you can polish and revise to make it shine more. Be wary of some areas that might seem like possible plotholes, or having the character being too "perfect" that it starts becoming unrealistic.

It's 5 Stars So Far, It Has Great Potential, I Have Very High Hopes For This, As It Is Overall Very Good In My Opinion, Hopefully It Doesn't Get Dropped.

Surprised to see how well written. I will be voting for this constantly to get it more notice hopefully he gets premium deal!  To the author thank you for the work keep it coming

Cooking and comedy are my kind of thing. I just hope the storyline is good. Too bad though there isn't much information from the synopsis. On the positive note, the cover photo is kinda catchy so I think I give this one a try. (if it doesnt require any spirits yet 😅)