Hello guys, Author here! Finally giving myself a self review of 4 star, because I acknowledge that my writing quality isn't perfect and my release is only around 10 chaps per week! Furthermore, I realize that my character design is quite bland for now, but that is actually on purpose! (Really!) Why? Because I plan to go professional one day, and this is my free version of the novel! So you can expect for it not to be that detailed right? (After all, I'm writing it for free lol).After I finish this first arc (chapter 1 ~ 30) I will re-edit it (I will hire editor such as proofreaders and grammar checker) and add more flavors to the novel. I plan to publish the edited version somewhere which is a paid version (WHICH WILL BE WORTH IT!). Will I stop publishing here you ask? The answer issssssss ~ No! I will continue to publish chapters here for free as usual, just that the quality will remain like this, and I hope that is tolerable lol. Where will I publish the perfected version of the first arc in the future you ask? I will inform you guys about that soon! Don't worry!To all my loyal readers, be that free or premium readers in the future, I thank you for your support and spending your time reading my work! I truly appreciate it from the bottom of my heart!You guys are the reason why I have the motivation to continue writing! And if you really really really reaaaallyyyy love my work, I hope you can become part of my premium reader where I will create an online community specifically for us to hang around!Until then, do continue to support me! Thank you and enjoy reading! ;)
Starting this review, I have to say that the premise of the story is very interesting and fairly original so kudos to you!Overall Rating 3⭐:Good read. You may want to wait until there are more chapters. Rating: World background 3⭐: What you expect is what you get. The world the MC transmigrates to is a hentai-dating-sim whith heavy emphasis on Martial Arts, where if you if you are not perfect to a girl...well NTR is in the title. Character design3⭐: Not much to be said really, most characters in genuine dating sims come off as stale and one-dimensional so expectations are kinda low. As for the MC...The concept is not necessarily bad. Reading about a weak-willed individual finding his way and tackling his problems in such an absurd scenario could be enthralling, but due to how the story is written in first person the MC comes across like a dumb crybaby, especially in the latest "Do you have a dream?" arc. Seriously it's like he can't think for himself at all. Story development 4⭐: The story is captivating with mysteries,twists and heavy emotions thrown into the mix. It may be a bit of a mess at the beginning with moral and logical inconsistencies but I find it mirrors the MC's **yche so it's okay. What is not okay though is the lack of interaction between the MC and the netorare girl. Chapter 47 is my favourite so far mainly due to how the phonecall plays out, so you can understand how lackluster I find the interactions with the previous girl. Writing 4 ⭐: The story can be read properly despite being written here, full marks....that is what I would have said, but I have to say that the story would be better with permanent 3rd person pov. Updating stability 1⭐: Not much to say really. Look at the chapter content dates and judge yourself.
This is one of the best novels ive read that focus on climbing a tower, this book has great potential and can definitely reach the top if you put enough effort, please do not drop this🙏
don't overcomplicate sentences, make it simple if you can. i want to read novel, not study journal. it's uncomfortable to read. i just skim through the chapter. 10 chaps is all i can do. the first few chapters are good, it gone downhill after mc transmigration(?) to the past, i don't know why, i just lost the will to read the rest, it's just felt uncomfortable to read.it has good potential. my advice is, let your friend read it first before posting it in WN
Hi! This is kera, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.
The start is admittedly a little slow however it does get better and the story is now moving at a better pace (currently on chapter 524). However each adventure the group goes on is interesting if there is one thing I will say is that in the first 50 or so chapters there are a couple of chapters of when it’s just the group grinding however when it gets into later into the chapters the fights become gradually better written and more satisfying overall story is currently 4.5 but the first 100 chapters is about a 3.75-4. So if u are in the first hundred chapters and u don’t have much else to read I would still recommend continuing as long as you like some parts of the story.
On the way back, SnowFlake pulled ShockrimPaw to the side of the group and said, "You were told to stay in camp. Why are you here and why did you not listen?"
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