Eternal Echoes of Love

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This story is not suitable for human consumption. I do not understand why the author has refused to hire an editor. I assume it is because of insatiable greed as he can't bare to part with a single penny to ensure his work is understandable. Reprehensible. Furthermore, the author's personality at the end of the chapter really bugs me, constantly complaining about ranking or uploading chapters that just say there will be no chapter etc.I dropped it in the mid 90s and checked later chapters and the grammar did not improve. Concept is good and I should rate it higher in that regard but the writing is repetitive, grammar is trash and chapters contain little to no actual content, making this a giant waste of time that I can't consciously give anything more than one star.Readers, do not waste your time!

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The idea was perfect. I want to see where this would develop if you would continue writing it. Although the characters could use some work, I liked the premise. Not many people take something like NTR and try to make a good story out of it. Usually, most people just through a person's feelings out of the window and just end it there in NTRs. Respect for trying! And I want to see more.Spoiler Review:Main-Character used his [calm mind] ability after talking to his girl. Even though he himself was calm, his thoughts really weren't. Serenity isn't just not shouting and screaming. Just because you aren't visibly violentwhether verbally or physically, doesn't mean you are at peace or calm.Owen was anything but calm at that moment, even after using his ability.He ignored her reactions and stuttering as she tried to complete a sentence and was telling whatever he came up with- without noticing her obvious stressed and shocked state of mind. He was just trying to come out morally superior to her OR he tried to rush it- either reasons heavily implicate he himself was not calm at all. Regarding Jack, is that really all he wanted out of her? Did he dedicate himself to her for a year just for a quicky? He knew all the tricks about social dynamics and that was his conclusion? Don't get me wrong, he got me pretty riled up and I hated his guts but she let him choose her clothes, the way she acts, how to be more feminine- and you're telling me they never ONCE hung out? Or at least let Jack be near enough to drug her? It just doesn't fit- just as much as Owen being "calm" yet not listening to her at all.But- Like any story, nothing is perfect. And here, you have an option to edit your previous chapters. I hope you will someday come back here and make this work since I like video games and system stuff and, of course, Anti-NTR.Best regards, and good luck-Hazy.

Entire Novel in short.. 1. MC becomes mighty.. earn billions.. still wears dirty mud laced clothes and ride a  tri wheeled bike... Others look down on him.. mc gets angry.. calls big bosses with high class cars --> face slap2. Has a older gf.. sleeps with her.. goes around flirting with other girls like a *****.. guys gets jealous.. calls him peasant and poor sod.. mc shows his wealth --> faceslap.. guys call gangsters who mc had already beaten.. the rest is clear --> faceslap.. 3. Masters of the world faces supernatural enemies.. gets in trouble.. calls mc.. mc shows his power.. problem solved.. 4. Police are useless.. can't slove a single case because arrogant young masters are there.. calls mc.. he uses his connection.. case solved.. police 0 mc 1.  Hail the mc.. 5. Doctors are incompetent trashes.. can't treat a disease.. mc appears.. disease goes.. 6. Arrogant.. competent and beautiful females.. becomes pussy infront of young masters.. mc appears... Another ***** added.. After all of this.  Our mc is *pure*, *innocent*, *humble* #######PEASANT. Sometimes I wonder... Is world gonna come to an end when these kind of shits get chosen while other good ones get rejected.. or dropped 😭😭😭

to start this off properly I have to preface this with I haven't read this book yet I just wanted to say something to the author. you said roughly that the mc will start off weak and not to expect him to power level, i'm fine with that as long as his abilities are either interesting and or well explored.a example of this is the dao of magic it takes a already interesting and IMO ability/power cultivation and explores it rather thoroughly.the reason this is relavent is because "to me at least" this is one of the major draws to a op fan fiction almost instant access to cool abilities/powers to explore.this acts as a really good hook to get people to stay and continue reading especially on fan fic sites, because you most probably won't find people who care about the story or character development as long as the mc doesn't make them want to throw up in repulsion.ps sorry if this comes out as a big block of text I wrote this on my phone I tried to make it not one but I can only hope it worked.

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The sniffling mess of a maid, red in the eyes, and fearing for her life, slowly got on her knees in front of Song Hua and pressed her head to the floor.