Principality fell ... Empire Bosses, all conquered, took a lot of gold, silk and precious stones, she was able to win with their skill and the number of brave warriors. Super warriors and super armor of several hundred knights of principalities could not resist tens of thousands of warriors ...
First of all, I LOVE the book cover! It was the first thing that piqued my interest for the story. Secondly, the writing style of the story is excellent. I like how the author descriptively introduces the characters, allowing the reader to sink into the drift of how the story might turn out to be. The story development is pretty good, and there are no problems with grammar on my side. Overall, I praise the author for creating a lovely story. Keep it up!
I should have probably put this as a review for the author's other novel, but since it's been dropped now (rip) I thought it better to multitask and try to promote this new novel somewhat.Anyway, it's good so far. I love how you seriously seem to have taken feedback from your first work and improved your writing; it is much more sleek and nice to read, the story seems to know where it's going, and while the book is far from perfect, I've enjoyed binge-reading it the past day (although do note this could mean i am writing this with some recency bias).Now, why the low(ish) ratings? Well, because I think it's better if I'm fair and actually give feedback as opposed to slapping 5 stars on everything, and giving lower ratings allows easier comparison to see how I actually think the different aspects of the story stack up against each other. Writing quality is 4 stars, so good there. My loose criteria for 5 stars is to impress me in some way. Either teach me a new word, consistently use vivid descriptions, use a couple of semi colons etc. Story development is 3 stars because first of all, it's still early, and secondly, while executed pretty well the story isn't super original so far - not that it has to be in order to be good. Same sort of thing for character design. Average, sometimes unrealistic characters, with no impressive or difficult to portray personalities so far. Updating stability got a 4 because it's still early and as a criterion for a review it makes little sense. World background is 3 cause it's decent so far, but again the story is in its nascent stages, and a bit derived. Show me something new. Doesn't have to be crazy. Even something that isn't new, but not normally seen in this genre; that's how i give a good score for world background.Of course if you have any questions at all or want any more feedback/further explanation (and that goes for others reading this as well as the author) I'd be happy to answer. Good luck, I'm enjoying so far
Dear author, please continue writing! Your style is engaging, and the events of the novel captivate the reader from the very first lines. The detailed descriptions and masterful narration bring the world to life, and the characters possess depth that arouses interest. The suspense you add with each scene makes me eager to know what will happen next. This novel holds immense potential, and I am confident it will become one of the unforgettable stories!
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