Deviant Dimensions - Chronicles

The synopsis makes it seem like the talent the mc has is just average with the help of the system that the mc’s character will probably be naive especially with the last line of the summary.

Novel:绿洲中的领主i am posting chinese name for those who want to read raw. Its a good novel, sometimes boring but still good enough to read. Anyway enjoy

Really quality writing! Super impressed with this one; I havent spotted really any grammar or spelling mistakes so far - the story is really gripping. Also, I love Vampires!

This is a review from Chapter 1 to chapter 16 and so the things I discussed in my review might have been fixed already,  writing Quality-2- The sentences could be better. It seems you fond of using 'to' in explaining the motives of actions. Consider trusting your readers. An example can be found in chapter 2. 'Once they had stepped inside, he reached for the button to send them to the ground floor.'This can be changed to'Once they had stepped inside, he reached for the ground floor button.'Another example can also be found in chapter 2.'the elevator chimed again to let them know that they had reached their destination.'This can be changed to'the elevator chimed and the door opened. They had arrived'Using 'to' is a little jarring. Aside from that, sentences can be shorter too. Take this example from chapter 12.'His own path to the office was made simpler by the private elevator that took him straight from the parking garage to the thirty-second floor where his office was.'The sentence is too long. The longer the sentences get, the weaker they are. Shorter sentences are easier to understand. Also better words could have been used in expressing the idea. 'A private elevator eased his access from the garage to his office in the thirty-second floor.'or'A private elevator simplified his access from the garage to his office in the thirty-second floor.'The thing is, readers don't actually want to read. They say they do but that is a misconception. Nobody wants to read. Reading is a tedious process. What the readers want is the information from. So if writers can express a story in a thousand words rather than two thousand, then that would ease the burden of reading. The job of writers is to lull the readers into believing a tale they crafted with the shortest word count possible. Stability of updates- 5- I don't really care much about stability of updates. Automatic 5.Story Development - 3- The story is about falling from heights and rising again with the help of several characters. As of chapter 16, the story is still kicking off which is partly because of the short chapters (which is not a bad thing). It feels like a slice of life novel despite being presented with an interesting conflict. Nothing much is happening. But I can see that the story needs to trek the path of being docile for now. Chance is still adjusting after all. I suggest bringing a few side conflicts to spice this slow beginning. Personality conflicts, backstories, things like that. But honestly, I can't really say much. I've already put the story in my library. I will resume reading soon and hopefully I can make another review after catching up with the latest chapters. Character Design-3- Chance is a broken man. What happened to him was tough. His journey from being broken into rising up again is a little fast in my opinion. Other than that I don't really have problems. World Background- 5-  I don't get why Webnovel has this aspect in reviews. World background? What does that mean? If it means magic systems and the worlds in isekais, then what about novels which are not fantasies? They could have replaced this with dialogue or something.Additional notes- I have no qualms about the changing of perspectives. It happened a few times that I thought the perspective is in third person omniscient. But seeing the potential of the mystery surrounding Fait's character and the other mysteries too, I think omniscient point of view is a poor choice. Final score- I added 1 full star as consideration. Webnovels are not published novels after all. 4.6

Sorry I just have to give it a 5 star review on account of the mc’s name                                                                    

Forced myself to read it hoping it would get better, but definitely not my cup of tea. I find it really irritating that qidian forces us to write at least 140 words in our review. I get where the are coming from, but some novels don't deserve that many words.

"r_run" Jessica spoke with great difficulty.

"hey i am sara you must be mira" she introduced herself giving me her hand to shake. I was still shocked i was gawking at her , even though i have seen so many beautiful girls she was the most cutest tiny thing ever. However recovering myself from the stance i held her hand and shook it for just two times and then left it. "she's beautiful " was the words which was going on my mind. I heard a giggle, looking up at her she was blushing and said "thank you, but you're more beautiful than me". Did she hear me? How can she hear what i said in my mind? "oh no you said it loud" she said and started laughing again. She had a mesmerizing laugh too. When she was laughing my eyes fell to her tummy it was big and showed that she was pregnant. And all my happiness came down crashing. She was pregnant and she must be xaviers wife. He's going to be a dad and i am here romancing with him. He had a nerve to cheat on such a beautiful soul standing in front of me. The anger boiled in me i got up from the bed and marched down lookig for Xavier where the girl sara was shouting from back to slow down and to wear my clothes but now i care the least about how i look.