Chronicles Of The Shadow Sovereign

Karna instantly understood that the black orb contained the <Great Way of the Sun>. He converged his <Soul Sense> to the black orb.

I wonder how many people read this novel without knowing the anime.

I look forward to bringing this novel back.

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Seeing her Noah frowned because she was his first love and the one who still gave him nightmares.

One day, I was playing my favorite video game on Xbox one. All the sudden a portal came up inside of my game then behind me another portal popped up, I got sucked inside and then I came right back out. But I was somewhere different, then I realized I was in my video game!!! I was so amazed I straightaway beat the game with my skills. But then I realized, how would I get out?!? I mean I was in Zelda breath of the wild, there were beasts everywhere then, I said " I want to leave this place" then straightaway a portal popped right in front of me. I jumped right in. Then right after that I realized I was inside the video game for , 10 years?!!!? The second my parents Saw me, they ran toward me, and gave me a hug and a kiss. Do you show me a missing sign and I had my face on it. I was finally home, but how could I have taken that long....

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Well it's definitely the author's first work, I can tell. I do applaud you wholeheartedly for actually sticking to the story and actually following an upload schedule.Well with that out of the way, I would like to offer some suggestions. The grammar itself isn't the worst. Obviously there are mistakes here and there (mainly about punctuation and sentence structure) but that's about the average quality you can find on webnovel so I wouldn't fault you. You are writing in first person POV which is really good for a character driven writing style, but the problem is that you need to include more descriptive language into your writing to make us engaged with the story as well as adhering to 'show don't tell' thing. You see, humans have 5 senses, but you only describe what the mc sees and exclude hearing and smelling completely which otherwise could have helped in making your world feel alive (here you can also use metaphors and comparisons like many authors do). You should also include more internal monologues so that at the very least make him somewhat entertaining to read, as well as slow down the pace a bit to make actions feel natural.

I am comfortable reading. Not too great and not too bad.

yo I just saw that you finally posted this story, can't wait to see more for this. Hope that the quality of the story is the same as the other one.

the premise and characters are nice but the grammar and spelling mistakes are so frequent it is crazy how this ended up as the freebie today.author, this one just isn't for me because even by WN standards this is just too broken but I don't want you to think I'm just trashing it. The romance scenes were well done and i liked how you structured his awakening while still leaving some mystery. With a good editor or grammarly, I could see this book on Amazon tomorrow.

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