Building a crime empire

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The author creating something totally unique, the start was captivating, it caught my interest write away and here I am recommending anyone who sees this to read this novel.

KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK AUTHOR!

I finally found a novel that contains what I have searched for on this and other sites for over a year now: Realistic organized crime fiction.
I like the story even if it feels a bit fast paced. Especially when between later chapters (20-30) it sometimes feels like some scene that was supposed to be in between, was skipped.
Like it very much!
Would recommend!
9/10
looking forward to new chapters :)

Can someone for the love of god tell me other stories like this? Where does the protagonist create a gang or cartel that becomes as powerful as the army?

Note: I only read 4 chapters.

It felt like I was watching a case study in my crim course. The protagonist was chilling to read about, not because descriptions were detailed but due to his reckless decisions and lack of stress in the moment of crime.

Despite being written in first person there are actually a lot of points that go unexplained. Decisions are told to the reader then acted upon, not really elaborated on further. It’s a missed chance to get to know the protagonist’s thought process more.

Contrary to my previous comment, I think the author has fallen into a trap that you can easily fall into when you write in first person—telling rather than showing. The beginning of the prologue is a good example, there are clearly a lot of emotions but it’s mostly being expressed though monologue. It ends up looking like a rant someone tweeted rather than words in a novel. Describing using literary devices like similies and metaphors can go a long way.

Grammar wasn’t terrible, just missed some capitalization of words after the end of a dialogue and a few contradicting use of tenses. At one point there was a section that written in past, present, then past again even though it was referring to the same period in time.

I wish you the best on the rest of the novel, Author!

really good read but the  Author has seemed to drop this or has disappeared he really should come back. And then that the story is great it feels somewhat natural how the MC grains power It can be a little fast at times but still you can see that logical progression. The world and characters around the MC are well detailed and seem like realistic people

"\"Building a Crime Empire\" is a riveting tale that captivates from the very first page. The protagonist's journey, a masterful blend of cunning and vulnerability, keeps readers hooked. The gritty underworld depicted is both vivid and thought-provoking, reflecting the blurred lines between ambition and morality. The plot twists keep one on edge, making it difficult to put down. A compelling read for fans of crime fiction, it's a rollercoaster ride of power, loyalty, and the relentless pursuit of success. Highly recommended for those seeking a gripping narrative that stays with you long after the last chapter."

"Building a Crime Empire" is a gripping tale that delves into the complex world of organized crime, weaving a narrative that explores the human side of its characters and the intricate dynamics at play. The novel captivates readers with its vivid portrayal of ambition, loyalty, and the fine line between morality and survival. As we follow the protagonist's journey from humble beginnings to the heights of power, we are reminded of the allure and allurements of the criminal underworld, as well as the harsh realities it exacts.

The author deftly balances the brutal violence with moments of unexpected empathy, allowing us to understand the flawed motivations behind the protagonist's choices. It's not just about cold-blooded crime, but the psychological toll it takes on those involved, both personally and professionally. The novel serves as a cautionary tale, illustrating how easy it is to lose oneself in the pursuit of power, and the devastating consequences that can result.

What sets "Building a Crime Empire" apart is its ability to humanize even the most hardened criminals, making their struggles and desires relatable. Through its compelling storytelling, the book challenges our perceptions of good and evil, leaving readers pondering the nature of power and the lengths one might go to maintain it. Overall, this thought-provoking novel is a compelling read that leaves a lasting impression on the complexities of the human condition and the dark underbelly of society.