This is great.The writing and plot development leaves much to be desired, having a open background lets you add characters and elements into the story anywhere you want to but it's a bad habit to make.You need to foreshadow and plan more how things can go, stacking events and descriptors one on top of the other does not a story make, that's just bad writing.Even as a comedy you tend to lean towards the more serious side whenever a harsh topic comes up. It's too careless to just change the tone, you have to break the tense atmosphere properly before running with a joke.At times, you corral your character's personality into single sentence or single word statements. If this was purely comedy it's fine but when you mix drama you need to avoid pigeon-holing your characters to stereotypes. This makes them less a person and more like a set piece used to work the scene.You rely too much on light novel tropes who also rely too much on anime tropes. If you're good it works, but like most light novel authors you don't quite realize certain gags work better visually than on text.You should read more wholesome literary comedies or watch more British humor to balance your slapstick with punny wit.
First thing is first I really like the fact that the mc is different in the sense of the way that mostly all the other mc simply gain strength to become immortal or for revenge, but the Last Hunt’s protaganist Seeks strength to reunite with his little brother. This in itself earns a good rating in my opinion. Well done author.And if I were to point out a sore spot of the story, it is as the author said, his English isn’t good. But I am certain as the author continues to write his English would also get better. For the reason I am only sure is because I have only read till the not locked chapters.Well done Author! 👏🏻 👏🏻 👏🏻
overall the story is good. the funny plot not so forced and not lame at all. the interesting part is about the cultivation itself. but the story need more details about the world and surrounding environtment so the imagination of the reader can be perfect when reading it. overal it's good novel and worth to spend your coins on it. i hope i can read next chapter....
It was really good for the first 40 chapters, but literally chapter 41 the Nationalism skyrocketed and become solely about how China can handle anything while other countries will fall. It literally says that Mein Country (America) is the strongest country in the world, but is struggling to hold the enemies back. All while China could easily handle 3 times more than them, all because they have a longer history.You can't claim one country to be the strongest, then suddenly claim another country could easily have 3 times more than even the strongest country.
this is an mtl novel, so I edit the chapters to make them look presentable. If you ever see something fatal mistake in the chapters like this please comment to let me know.
This is story it´s badly writen, and it´s a problem of the author not of the translator. Not a problem with the plot but there are a few of things that make me drop this in the third chapter:-In the first chapter the author JUSTIFIES the narrator, and he did it quite badly.-The narrator voice, the MC, wow... it is really anoying, and it´s not believable thats not the voice of a seven years old.-THE SPOILERS, the author just throw a lot of sopilers inside his story.
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