Just One Hug

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This story is very fun. Seeing our mc fight the mc of the first world is very fun and the interactions with the system are fun. One thing that does annoy me is the proactiveness of the MC, he often just lets things happen without actively being involved in the plot. I understand why he does this and it also makes sense because it is his first world but I hope that changes as the story goes on and he goes around yoinking a lot more important stuff. That being said, the MC isn't a weak character though some of his actions can be seen as a little cowardly.The story right now is pretty simple and its enjoyable. I don't have any major problems with it, it's not great, its not bad. This story does not deserve a 5 but due to the nature of this platform I gotta give it a 5 otherwise I may as well have killed its parents.

Fascinating story. From the plot unique you can tell that it has the potential to blow into a sweeping story. There were logical errors there as well as sentences where the past tense should be used. But hey, we're only human. Apart from that, the story was straightforward to read and had a continuous flow. Keep up the good work. You'll do fabulous.

Revenge of the NPC, I hope?  I love the idea of an NPC getting access to player powers.  But I wonder if he will be able to really work out what is going on,

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Though a bit fast paced,the novel is  great so far.

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Dahandahan kong minulat ang mga mata ko ang Arte kasi nitong mlessean na to e

1 week later we finally arrive at the tower where I will spend 2 years locked up

Looking toward the mysterious lady, who had now been identified, the man asked with a serious tone.

-ouvre

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