It Is A Different World And Yet I Am Cultivating Monsters

"Bring it on"

Good premise but needs more story telling. Right now it's just a paragraph explaining the backround. If you are writing from third person then the narrator should fully introduce the princess after initial back round intro. Then everything that happens should be her thoughts or perspective. If it's first person then she narrates everything as it happens or happened depending on past or future tense. Don't give up though, I'm working on learning to do just that myself. Puting a story online is a good way to start learning. your story has potential and I would like to see more!

"We have eight warriors including me. The other seven consist of D-Rank and E-Rank warriors."

Didn't make sense not to live for fun

Hey now, you're a rock star, get the show, on get paid

Insurrection grew, rebellion rose, anti-enhancers came with ideologies and supporting masses, they all rose and fell again eventually powerless against the enhanced.

Then the screen at the top turn on and show the picture of Lawrence in his I.D. and Derek

I tried to read this but I can't read this while losing my brain cells...

Awesome! I'm loving it already! Just wish it updated more,