Inequivalent Exchange

I think this story has a lot of potential. Key points to look out for:1) use of dialogue, think you could Make use of more dialogue. the entire story is written in Lincolns thoughts with sparse use of dialogue. 2) character development: The story is too focused on Physical development and has ignored much of lincolns mental development3) world sEtting: the entire transition to rocks Pirates, the worlD government, strength levels are not too clear Even with the auxiliary chapter4) Story pace: reading just the first few chapters, it Already the gives the feeling that the story will end in 10-15 chapters max.  You want to make sure you have a modest goal in terms of how long this fanfic will be and pace yourself to achieve that goal

Pretty meh. It was cool at first, but it became long winded. The first bank robbery scene lasts basically 15 chapters or so. Way too long imo. I got bored when nothing was happening. They just kept exaggerating how ferocious he looked or whatever. Boring

Yeah, time sure does fly. It was a couple million years ago, but feels just like yesterday that I saw the first multicellular organism coming out of the primordial ocean. I almost stepped on it. Luckily I avoided it and now we have life on Earth. I have to say, the Chinese sure goes back a long way, just like me. 😕

I hope this time hey actally realese the books and dont just delee them like everyone else im really looing forward to the storys this week.  --------

supporting the author with the ratings as the synopsis showcases everything I like in a mc. Hope the author writes this story to the end. This could very well be a hidden gem as the story progresses into 200+ chapters so stay strong and faithful author 💪

I don't know how to write reviews. So I'll just write what I think. This is a good book. It's worth your time to read. I look forward to the next chapters.

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