Fine

Love it so far! Writing quality is good. Character design is simple but effective.

Mostly a long shopping list again and again. Needs to flesh out about the people, family, etc. Tired of what antique sells for what and how many tons of rice etc. Good idea for book but falls short of what it could be.

I was recommended this by a good friend of mine so far one chapter in I can’t wait to see how this story will story progress , Xerxes is such  a great character and I can’t wait to see the mystery of the fallen kingdom unfold.❤️❤️❤️

Okay, to the point, first, your writing still needs improvement, many are too short, and moreover, emotional blur, but I noticed an interesting flow, just don't get good execution, for the next you can learn how to write better, such as making the narrative feel alive, etc.