It's so wrong of you to have a novel that could be so much better held back by grammar issues. The story is there, the character is there, but the last of the big three THE GRAMMAR is no where to be found. I can get past the dialogue issue, but you just can't throw commas at a run-on and expect that to solve it. It has gotten to the point that I'm wondering if you read over what you write. At one point in the Novel you even call the MC a young woman (specifically ch.35). I've tried pretty hard to read this novel, but the mistakes are too glaring to let slide. Even when I skimmed through I was noticing mistakes. Without an editor I feel I'm being pretty lenient giving it this score. If you are serious about this novel you should really consider working with someone to fix the mistakes.
Chap 34 so far truly an interesting read so far, I like the plot so far with the three and the way the author used such an overlooked point to put them on different paths.
When Axel came back to the guild everyone was ready for party. Kagura, Simon, Jenny and Jenny's new boyfriend Hibiki Lates from Trimens also there. Jenny and Axel give a chance to their relationship but their schedule didn't match each other all the time so they barely saw each other at that time. Axel was always busy with jobs, he was trying to uphold name of the entire guild, that didn't mean other members of Fairy Tail is weak, no they are strong but not S-class so as an ace Axel was always busy with his duties. So Jenny was right to complain after all who wouldn't want his/her lovers attention? But Jenny didn't complain too much she was very understanding but that didn't stop end of their relationship. Thought they are still friends with each other and when she found love with Hibiki, Axel congratulate them and said he was happy for them. After that Axel and Kagura get close to each other, Kagura learned from Simon that Axel was the one saved Simon's life so Kagura was thankful and hold deep respect for him. They go to a date but both of them felt awkward and decided that as a friend they are better. Everyone saw Axel and little Asuka run towards him and jumped, he hold her and throw her up to the air and catch her which made her and her parents laugh. Axel saw Asuka as a sister/daughter so whenever he was in the guild, he always look after her, and even some nights thanks to her parents certain night activities.
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