Diario de Keegan

the background of the story is good, though a bit unclear, I wish there were paragraph separations, it all seems like one block of text... it can definitely improve and it has hella potential! keep going!

(please take my review with a grain of salt as I normally read fanfics and those, as most would know have a terrible standard for quality. This review is from memory up to chap. 45 reading it once.)The story is normal for its type; The genre of survival novels with systems have been gone over by multiple authors over the 2 years already. This novel approaches it similarly with a difference of focus. It focuses more on the harem part from what I've read. Focusing on the Characters around the MC on how they respond to the sudden shift of power due to the situation they were thrown in. Since the other characters that had been introduced from the start were mostly women we focus on oh they react to the main character. While we do also see the interactions of the MC to the characters the MC is simplistic in design. We haven't explored how the main character thinks with little internal dialogue which actually matters to the characterization of the person in question. The conflicts were introduced well enough that I wouldn't complain  though they are also quite simple serving a purpose of drawing the women to him and developing the MC in the survival sense showing how a person with such abilities adapt to survival in an island.The system is weird at times but doesn't stray from what it says it does.The MC gains experience and exchanges them for knowledge and abilities that would be somewhat understandable in the situation. Not to fantastical but not mundane enough that it would bore you. The description of the abilities though I found lacking. The abilities were shown yes  but I would have responded better with more description to both the scene and the actions of the characters.(If you've reached this point then you have fully read (maybe) the review. Thank you for taking your time for reading this poorly written review from a person with little experience in reviewing or looking at books with an analytical eye. I hope you have a pleasant day, week, month and year.)

The word Cliché is an understatement for this fast as* plot, come on, put some depth into your novel, the only thing that's keeping your novel from being the same as MTL is the decent English, you could have put some time to add depth into your novel, your novels feels like a copy and paste of typical URBAN Chinese novel with the author having patience of a 5 year old, and imagination of a person under a rock, just by having 1 love interest you separate from the other urban novels, by having patience and making it so that he spends his money in a smart way would make your better than others, and by making his system point is converted by spending money with a ratio of 1:10000 and by having plans & goals you will have something to look forward to.

"something else?" I reply

"You must be thinking about that night, right?" She added.

Below, many fleeing humans were screaming and aiming their obscenities at him. Rogue looked down abruptly, starling the small beings even more. For a second, the titan scanned the crowd for both his own humans and little ones. The curses were thrown harder. Not seeing his companions, Rogue let out another whine and carefully stepped aside – making sure not to hurt anyone in his vast wake. Once anew, he took no time in observing their confused reactions. He had a job to carry out – one he could not afford to fail at.

Elsa:nawawala na nga si xenon pati ba naman si xyrus aalis huhuhu....

Alyssa escorted me towards the faculty room, the school looks the same as other schools but the difference is, this school building is large and the amount of students each room exceeds fifty plus.