Alryt, nice story I must say. Your writing quality is great. You got a nice flow I give u that. But you might want to cut down your paragraphs in your second and third chapter. Cos in those chapters, you have lots of important info... So making it long, made my head ache some more with my headache. I had to focus so much or I wud av lost what the paragraph was saying. Normally a paragraph shud b btw 3-5 if I am not mistaken. Little or no typos, great book n plotline author. It shows author knows what he is doing. Added to my library, would love to see where this is going. Nice work, keep it up.
I GET IT!! I GET IT!! HAHAHAI think I get it...The biggest misunderstanding of all haha!! I won't spoil anymore. I almost drop this book because of it but then, haha. The author doesn't want to explain it so I won't spoil anymore..This is already my second review lol. But the grammar still need improvement though. Hope this won't drop.
the story concept is interresting, the world around it could use some more work, the romance ... are man really this dense? or did i just oversee the dense protadonist tag? the romance also makes me feel like the mc is somehow gay or stuck at the age of 10 mentally. even the children have more EQ then him. just looking at his dungeon name. how can he not relayse till now what a morningwood is??leaves me with the question: what did he do at school, because in todays society even they know.sadly the only thing keeping me going for now was the interesting farming concept.to the autor, don't let my critice put you down. i belive with more work you will surly get better over time. just use the readers view to better yourself, every start is hard. but also do not allow everything we write to you, its your story and your idea. put warning in the prologe this way no one can complaine to you later for ignoring them.best wishes and continue writingps english is not my native languagr so please excuse the mistakes. thanks
It almost looks like qidian hate post-apocalypse novels. And love fa,g.g.ot novels As there is already hiatus on Dark King, Apocalypse Meltdown. Possible some more. And these are the good ones. Not so much even racism in these ones.
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