Blasian

i will tell the good and the bad thing about this fic.the good :+ premise story and plot development is interesting.+ mc is cool and reasonable, not cocky, not perverted, his sole goal so far is to protect his siblings. + Issei undergone traumatic event's so he mature early not indulging his perverted hobby instead he become protective to his family and trying his best to grow stronger to reach that goalthe bad :-way too many unnecessary OCs. issei sister, asia brother, loki and the gang. they become more important than canon characters. is there a point to read DxD fanfic if the main story is filled with non-DxD characters? you decide, but i personally rather read original novel instead if there is too many OCs-mc is your perfect human, your gary stu, this kind of character is the worst character because such human is not possible. human is human because they are flawed or have vice, otherwise they just fairy tale angel. the story still early so maybe he have flaw or vice in the future. - Grammar is awful. pronoun is all wrong. the fic often use "he" pronoun for female characters or vice versa. the fic use "brother" for female character or vice versa. the fic use "hyoudou brother" for referring issei and his sister. it's quite clear that the author just use google translate and wont bother to proofread it. for author : use "hyoudou sibling" next timei think this fic have potential but the awful translation makes it unreadable. and the so many OCs fill the story to the point shifting out Canon characters is making me dont care about the story anymore. it's tough to read

İlk okuyucu incelemen benden gelsin yazar.Hikayenin zaman akışı ideal diğer evrim romanlarında olduğu gibi her büyük ilerleme için 100-200 geçmesine gerek yok gibi görünüyorMC'nin et yemekten çekinmemesi için 10 larca bölüm geçmesi gerekmemektedir bence büyük bir + onun dışında mc ilerde murderhobo zihinsel kapasitesi sahip olsa bence iyi olur yazar.İlk bölümleri değerlendirdikten sonraki kısa potansiyel yorumum : Yüksek potansiyele sahip bir evrim hikayesi olabilir sadece efsanevi yeteneklerin biraz daha nadir ve güçlü olması daha iyi olabilirdi sayın yazar.