Barosnis

in all honesty I'm enjoying it kind of, but there is so many issues on the translation it makes it almost impossible to follow correctly. names constantly changing, consistency rubbish and it like the characters have no idea what they are even thinking let alone saying

can u fking finish ur damn stories I mean seriously we pay for this app and these stories stop wasting our money and time, a lot of us r waiting for u to finish some stories

Es una buena historia pero le vendría mejor un poco más de crueldad medieval.Recomiendo que a pesar de desarrollar los secundarios no dudes en sacrificarlos si se da la necesidad para desarrollar al principal no caigas en el romance demasiado pronto eso por lo general le quita chispa a la historia.Por lo demás buen trabajo y recuerda es tú historia así que tú criterio primero.

I’m here again, hoping that we can have a chance to work together and we are willing to pay you for distributing your work.The conditions should be generous. If you are interested, please contact me via this email:adaren06*@*gmail.com(delete *）, then I should take this opportunity to discuss it with you in details.

The granmer is above the average in webnovel.The updates are consistent.You charecter needs a lot of work. The charecter acts like a 13 Year old boy. who’s second chance at life did’t tought him anything. The charecter made referances of Mc systems but doesn’t understand why his system has a quirky personality.World building is big part of the story, so, far the setting of your story remains vague. Please go more in detail to understan The circumstances your charecter is under base on the locations he is. and please read a business book. Your charecter setting is a business, your buSiness Sense sucks, honestly.

The gentle voice sounded again, this time with a hint of anxiousness.

Ally.

E: Sige... tara doon natin pagusapan.