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Fun, silly story except for the random s*xual things thrown in all of a sudden. Tags did not reflect that.It's a shame, because they didn't really add much to the story. They could have been simplified and cleaned up, have the same exact results, and be a story safe for all ages.Spoiler
The description of the former fiancé being castrated by the squid poison was a little weird and excessive, the discussion past "you do know how to make babies, right" that delved into weird s*xual education methods was unnecessary to the story line and world building and could have been completely eliminated, or if really necessary (which it's not for the story, because the characters never reach this stage in their relationship before the story's end anyway) could have been summed up with "make your wife feel good and pay attention to her and move slow". The tentacle monster thing taking v*rginity at the end... just seems like a weird fetish thing. The sister could have come up with other ways to make the MC undesirable.
[collapse]Really, they just seemed rather abrupt and unnecessary in an otherwise lighthearted, fluffy fairytale-like story.
