The Moon's Decree

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Overall, it wants to be good and I applaud this for trying something different.  It feels like someone watched the original Blade Runner and then added some Ghost in the Shell to it.The Good:  I like a dark, gritty, science fiction setting such as this.  This is not a child's novel, but it is still a familar power-building scifi novel.  We have some excellent character descriptions in most cases and the world itself appears interesting.The Bad:  The writing quality and word choices in some of the earlier chapters is awful.  A simple grammar check would've gotten most of them.  (For example:  Using bombarded as a noun when it should've been bombardment in multiple cases.)  It's trying to be dark and gritty at times and pulls this off well, but sometimes it is taken too far and just gets weird for me.  This is purely subjective so I can't really bash it for that.  The 18+ scene was... alright.  It needs something more or maybe more build-up.  Maybe I'm just getting old so it could work for others.The Neutral:  Not much to say.  The author appears to have experience setting up a good story, but the grammar just needs a bit of help.  The story seemed to escalate very quickly up to chapter 9 so I am not sure if this will be a long story or not.  Keep it up, though!  I'm enjoying it!

Li'er's little black eyes seemed to shine back, as the baby stared up at her mother. In their sandalwood cradle, Shao Long gave a seemingly indignant huff, causing the two women to look at each other and laugh. Seeing that Mo Li had finished drinking, Shi Du called over Little Li and handed Li'er to be burped and take Long'er into her arms for feeding next.

Interesting story

[The system can scan the host surroundings and keep a constant awareness in case of danger]

untuk barang kedua yaitu resep (pil nafas air) segera diberikan kepada tangan ajaib karena hanya dia satu-satunya yang mempunyai kemampuan peracikan segera saja tangan ajaib menyerap resep itu cahaya hijau masuk kedalam tubuhnya.

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From: Ciara