The Alpha and His Outlander Luna

Writing, I gave 4 because something looks off, you the feel is not coming try seeking inspiration from webnovels like the Supre Magus or Shadow Slave, etc. Updating Stability I gave 5, it is good 9 chapters in 4 days is nice speed, keep it up, but don't burn out. Story Development, I gave 4 because there can be more smoother transitions between scene changes and could add more detailed accounts of events. Character Design, again 4 because you have developed each side character's traits, behavior and overall design from the starting moment they landed in the story, but for the main character, you had made it so confusing. Initially he was much innocent and childish and that makes sense for a three year old but from chapter 4 he sounds like an adult and in case of Drengvar, he is more like a 3 year old but still he too, at the point when Noctis manipulates him, that point really doesn't make much sense dialogue transition got wasted. World Background also 4 Brooch system and Historic content is nice but naming of areas their culture "Byzantine" Is something standing off and we still don't know what's the purpose of having brooches? They are most likely for helping others as I see, but still it needs to be clarified which we expect later in the story at least. You have a lot of facilities given by webnovel app, you may try using the "Auxiliary Chapters And Volumes" For sharing extra information to clarify all these doubts and then to develop a fanbase. Overall, your work is fantastic and decent but still needs some improvements, that I have mentioned. Thank You.

This story ruined my sleep schedule, used up all my stockpiled fast passes from across multiple accts, and almost bottomed out my pile of coins that were painstakingly collected from week free memberships. Despite this I have absolutely 0 regrets.SandKastle why are you such a godly writer? Thug to Idol was completed less than half a year ago and already you came out again with a new masterpiece.

Hi, the story looks quite good, can't wait for more chapters.. and hope it's a long one like around more than 1000 chapters.. with interesting insect evolution, great world building and story development ...

Shameless author review, Please give reviews if you can, really trying to improve this book, so it's the best it can be. thanks so much for reading

"Apa yang akan menjadi taruhan kita?"

"maybe it'll be better if i'll eat with blythe"

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"He won't come back!" Queen retorted against his chest.