Shinobi From Hell

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This is not a shameless review by the author. I believe this novel deserves 5-star.
You might say that every author thinks that way about his own story. And I think you are right but I want to put forward some pros and cons pointing out as to why it deserves 5-star.

I won't be listing them separately as pros and cons as I believe that some points that might be cons for some readers might be pro for the other.

1. The story revolves around a dystopia and unlike those many 'just dystopia' it indulges in not only the dangers and injustice but also the aftereffects of such a defective system and also how the residents are emotionally affected by such an environment.

2., Unlike other novels where MC is absolutely weak from the start or absolutely strong from the start (a bit too strong making a mess of the story where every problem is a problem only until MC arrives), this novel has an MC who is physically average at the beginning but has the mental fortitude of a killer. So you have it, weak from the outside strong from the inside. (this is only true in the beginning MC grow in strength)

3. The story is mostly focused on the MC so there aren't multiple PoVs.

4. The writing quality I believe is good enough.

5. The story has a setting that is a mixture of occult literature and shinobi background.

Story starts off great, but...

I came and saw the tags, such as #harem.
I can say from the start when I started reading till chapter 17 that it should focus more on the MC because some readers just want to know on how the harem would usually start until it really becomes a 'harem'. This strange thought came to my mind that the male side characters were the harem of the MC, because the early chapters already started simultaneously detailing and focusing on the MC and the Side characters.

Introduction of side characters came out quicker than what I thought, you could've just started slow with one. Other side characters at the start doesn't really give that much support in the start story of the MC.

The story hooked me but stopped me from reading when the 2 male side characters started showing up, what is this? is this drama where a love triangle starts then goes to pentagon then octagon, so on...

I just skimmed and scanned and was too lazy to actually read because wherever I stop and try to actually read, it starts in a place where the side character shows up.

This gives vibes of Western and Eastern novel mixed together, that it makes me irritated when I think the about the negative points of both types of novel in one novel.

I would like to continue reading, but giving this review, it's time for me to move on and go to other novels.

-   Still rooting for improvement

it has a lot of fillers but it is really good, the world building is extensive and it has a nice plot and finally for all men of culture

Omo! Good plot you got there. It will draw attention for sure. I thought of reading just one chapter to be able to give a review properly but it hooked me so I read the remaining chapters. Good job , update more.

Really great work author. Would be rooting for you. Keep up with the good work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewed at chp93:
WQ(3/5) - There are some mistakes(typos, extra words, wrong sentence structures) but it's few and far in between. Nothing amazing but it's readable enough.

SD(2/5) - I'm not a huge fan of the pacing of the story. It feels very "jerky". Like a car shifting gears too quick. The plot progression so far has been lacklustre in my opinion. The premise is interesting enough but can't raise the score above a solid 3. Now for the "plot" for those who care, pretty alright. It's decent but not ground-breaking. So far we have a few chps of Selena and MC. It mostly depends on your preference, pretty rough but still quite vanilla.

CD(3/5) - I'm torn on this. The MC is interesting enough though frustrating at times. The issue is that the way the author introduces us to him as a character, there are far too many perspective shifts, it's told through flashbacks and having too many in any medium is never a good idea. It's fine to be used sparingly to show past events but thats the issue, here it's used as a tool to convey the MC's char to readers, even worse is it's in parts. It might contribute to that "jerky" feeling I get when reading. Now I commend the author for actually building side characters. For example, Selena and Verona are given a fair bit of screentime and inner monologues to give us an idea of their thoughts and character. This can be a double-edged sword however, as focus might be shifted off the MC. But I'm glad to say the author divided the focus quite well. Now why I'm torn on this is the fact I like the side char building but absolutely abhor the MC's char building itself. It feels inorganic and doesn't flow well compared to how the side chars are shown.

US(4/5) - The author seems pretty consistent in his updates and actually responds to his audience.

WB(4/5) - The world itself is slowly being built and honestly it would be a solid 3, I gave it a 4 just because it's piqued my interest and is genuinely interesting. The world the author is writing seems mysterious and intriguing, u can't help but think there are far deeper secrets due to the hints here and there.

In conclusion, a decent but rough read. The idea is solid but the execution isn't.  The pacing and plot of the story needs quite a fair bit of work, especially with the MC's char building. It just feels completely inorganic to show the character like this. But here's the great kicker, premium chps are locked at chp30. That is going to greatly hurt the exposure this novel is going to get. For the word count of chps, it's just not worth it. I might return to this novel in the future but so far it doesn't look too promising. All the best author and I hope this review helps.

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Please keep up the good work Author, the book has a nice start so, I'll expect it to be a worth-it five-star book.

Very good! Author got a good story going on here.

I just hope the MC can lighten up a little over time as he meets more people. I know it should take some time because of his past but some girls or friends should make him change eventually. [img=recommend]