My Lethal Company System

You might love Mc, but my favorite is Baku.In my country Baku is spiritual monster, rumors say it exist, and there is proof.Anyways, I like the character design, and why is the system so cocky

I'm giving you a rating of 5 because I understand that you're a novice writer, but there really are a few small errors in logic that personally bother me a bit. At the outset of the novel, he refrains from distributing additional bread despite being a "benevolent individual by nature

hmmm... the intro is eye-catching and interesting I have read something like this though..

"The equipment is ready, Master." Jester said while looking down saluting.

Silence.

And my other novel hase 10 times as many releases with the same amount of chapters 😱 times change, or this is just way worse 😂

I winced as another burning wave of pain shot through my body, but slowly I began noticing how they were getting weaker each time. After a while my breath settled down and the haze I was seeing withdrew from my sight. Now the adrenaline had worn off I could finally look around and see where I was. I was surrounded by trees, unable to see anything other than countless trunks seemingly lurking in the dark. My eyes automarically widened to their fullest, attempting to get as much information about my invironment as I possibly could. And I guess it somehow helped. I saw the faint edges of a path a little further and hesitant at first, I tried to get up. I was still weak and trembling on my feet, but I managed to pull myself together after a few tries. As I stumbled forward I stretched my back, attempting to loosen up the stiffened muscles, but I was awarded with a sudden burst of pain. I cringed and hunched my shoulders, trying to avoid it.

Basic Slash: Sends a sword slash  towards the opponent. If mastery is achieved levels up to intermediate slash. (125 Sword Proficiency points required to unlock intermediate)