Matrix Zero

The book is writing really well. The characters have a distinct personality and the world is introduced at a good pace. Although there can be improvement in writing quality, everything else is done really well. Highly recommend!

It's not a bad plot. Not consistent in terms of plot, especially when transitioning every chapter. Also, the whole Man City plot is straight-up dumb. Instead of selling his stock, he kept it so he could be a beta cuck who get his opinion rejected. Like seriously dumb. Mc acts like he wanna buy a club but can't due to his sellable stock at Man City. Easy solution, sell it, too bad Mc and author give dumb excuses to not sell the stock. I get Mc not buying Watford, but Mc not buying Man U is just dumb especially since he knew when Man U was brought. That was just some of the issues.

The novel is very unique, but everything looks too packed together. It's hard to follow anything.Try introducing new things and people a step at a time.

The language used in the synopsis creates some tension that could engage the readers.You make use of adjectives to your advantage by writing them in the right places, giving information about the characters without having to straight up describe It to the readers.The presentations of the Suryavanshi family (aside from the protagonist) are not introduced smoothly in the story. The writing acomplishes to transmit fairly the personality and emotions from the protagonist.It manages to make the reader wonder about the main character's past as It seems to be something that still has relevance in the present.The two last paragraphs shift from ,1srt to 3rd person in narration and It appears a tad disruptive even if the paragraphs in itself are wonderful.While the different narrators and their personalities can easily be distinguished by what's written, the main tool used is plainly explaining everything they think and how they are, and therefore the story's pace becomes quite slow. However, I appreciate that the male narrator gives off the impression that he's somewhat poetic or romantic a side from being hurt. Mostly for the way he talks, and the reader is subtlely warned of his extremism/desperation.The story could benefit from some more little actions that show the reader how they are. In the chapters that follow (chp. 4 and up) the depiction of personality, opinion and vibe improves and the main character's develope more!Seems like drama and catastrophe are about to happen at any time!

Emric: What?

His weighted down heart was finally free, which brought a natural smile to surface on his face.

Rukia was shocked as her rights were snatched,

"Fel Mother, are you not listening? they don't have Ki or Mana and they have technology far from our, don't you think that they already or almost solved health problem of talentless or minuscule energy people?"