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“Huh, I didn’t die from falling off the skyscraper,” Zhen said as he touched every part of his body.
His tragic life event on Earth has left him feeling hopeless and depressed. To escape and end it all, he chose death.
Unfortunately, life always loves to joke with people as Zhen is transported to another world. With his superficial knowledge from reading fantasy novels in the past, Zhen wasn’t even surprised by this kind of situation.
“Since heaven decided to give me a second chance, I shall do everything in my power to do whatever I want without being shackled.” Zhen slowly got up as he looked forward to his future path.
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Now let's go to the pros and cons of this novel.
Pros
Stability in update of course is great and the storyline is unique in it's own way as the protagonist does not "follow the book" rules.
It has some comedies and light-heart moment in a serious situation. The MC may seem like a simp but he's not because he has no lover like many male out there. Therefore, it's hard to know how to act around a female considering his inexperience.
Not much pros as this novel is just the beginning of me writing in an impulse.
Cons
Let's say the grammars and tense could really make the story a bit confusing but smart readers should understand my meaning. Of course, if you found some wrong use of tense, do let me know so I can fix it and not look like a fool.
The POV aka point of view does changes multiple time through out the novel but as I'm writing this review now. I have fully decided to get rid of the first POV to third POV as it's easier and gives me a wider range in story telling.
The fight scene are not that great given I don't specialize nor have experience in how to portray one. But I will try my best to improve it and please be lenient for once.
Overall, I didn't rate myself highly since most of the category is either a 3 star or 4star except for my stability of updates. I just hope you will give me a chance as a new writer in here.
Thank you for reading my really long review. (However, a review should be this long to begin with xD)
Your mc is just way to annoying, i really did try and read more, but at this point am just skimming through chapters.
(Mc problems)
1: The fact the he actually paid for the wand that was disposable was just bad, he could have still made excuses or try to haggle over the wand, you think he would learn a thing or two over haggling because he grew in that type of environment, but no, He didn't.
2: Some what the same problem, butcher guy was to ripping him off but as soon as he thought that the butcher guy was helping him with the girl, he dropped everything thing because he thought he was a "man of culture" for helping him with the girl.
3: MOST ANNOYING PROBLEM OF THEM ALL! Annoying simp mc, Jesus Christ the first pretty girl that he meets he instantly goes monke mode for her, I can't imagine what would happen when he meets someone like a Princess or a Queen, that look more beautiful than her or some other higher being that's more beautiful.
Although I may sound confident, this is my first novel ever written and I tried to include multiple genres into the story to be more interesting.
After writing each chapter, I would use a reader's perspective to read and see what is wrong and how it should be improved. Sometime, I would find typos or a line does not fit so I would go back to Inkstone to fix the mistake and re-update it.
I reading, but it is more out of false hope that the author leaves aside worn clichés and a little attention to detail and originality.
For most new writers when writing in the first person POV they do tend to overuse inner monologues as opposed to utilizing gestures and facial expressions as hints to the character's inner turmoils. Verbs such as frowning, smirking can also indicate mood. I would also like to see more active sentences rather than passive ones; it makes me more emotionally engaged.
Overall it is a very good story and a worthwhile read. Other than the writing which has room for growth, the character development, world-building, and plot progression is intriguing and makes you hooked onto the story. Good job!
Those who’ve made critic comments make fair points, if you somehow get to my review first you should take them into consideration.
Always remember : if you dont like the novel then you can always leave it
This is also a personal guideline, any novel below 4.5 is an easy pass
Thank you for continuously improving it too!
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