Crimson Lotus: Hell’s Blossom

World building good, flaw is good, pacing a bit slow at first but still can savor, the character building good; however, the book itself is still ongoing, I need to see further how  it will go. Pacing, great overall is good. A little tweaks on a grammar, and a bit cleansing to the unccessary words in dialogue and paragraph, all will be smooth to go. The story itself is interesting, the start was a very simple yet full of life, the first character who enter the scene, relate me much immediately, 😂😉overall, I highly recommend this story.

I am absolutely loving this story. The characters are fun and easy to become attached to. The comparisons between their time periods make everything more impactful.

Like I said in the comments the story is really well written but man I just hate the kind of main character you produced. At first I thought his arrogance and narcissistic scene in the beginning was just humor and him joking. But no that’s his character he’s arrogant, a narcissist and is always on a power trip. I can’t really say he’s intelligent because he hasn’t done anything intelligent except for the headmistress chapter. I also feels like he relies too much on the system, I feel like adding him being able to buy breakthrough was kind of dumb(btw I love op mcs) and it feels like he will never achieve anything on his own. That’s it like I said the story is really good but imo the mc is a 1 star character.

The story is quite great and the progress was done well. However, I don't quite like how the MC changed many things in Harry Potter... not because I am a fan of it, but because the author didn't seem to put some thought on this. For example, the MC modernized Hogwarts which not only destroy the historical and mystery ambiance of Hogwarts but also changed the whole plot. You must know that pure-bloods were repulsed and disdained muggle creations and if the MC modernized it, this plot would've been erased and Voldemort might not even exist. Another thing is, the rewards of the system seem to be random and didn't follow some rules.

Overall a good book. I recommend everyone to read it. later part one the book is excellent.

"What buy? Sugarmamitas, don't place me in your shoes! I made them!" Joshua claimed. He was a bit proud to show off to his friend. It does not always come a time where he can boast like today. Bj would always brag about his mutation and gene ability of invisibility.

She blushes in embarrassment.  

<p>"What do you mean you're quitting soon? I need to get some of my money back first." One of the players complained.</p>