Overlord of the Spear

It is a very fine, detailed, piece of work. However, there are major and/or minor issues with the story, such as, character description and background information. It is a story filled with lots of toxic/dark romance, I believe. I think you should get the main character to ditch the 'boyfriend' and get her to be with the 'stranger' from the first chapter. Still a great piece of work, continue improving on it.

I'm gonna leave it here, what makes it different between dragons and the fallen? Hope you explain it further, because it makes me wonder which one is older and stronger

This is good, that's why I'm leaving a review before I continue reading the chapters. I'd love everyone who comes across this to give it a shot and try to read this lovely story and you're not gonna regret reading it. I hope the author keeps it up and puts more effort into the writing.

The book is really good, simple and easy to understand. Every thing goes well, so a five stars instead. I recommend to read it!                             

In the shape of an "L" on her forehead

As I lay uncomfortable as my eyes open I realize that something isn't right, I rush to get up quickly as I feel pain on my neck and to feel something dripping down my neck it feels warm or is..it cold but as I start walking to the bathroom my vision is blurry...then the next minute it goes black...Then I feel something sharp bite into the same place on my neck where I felt the pain...then I open my eyes my vision is... it's all white like a bright light there are some distant voices in the light they sound smart maybe I'm dreaming again then...I hear a voice that sounds like my mothers, then reality sets in and I realize I am in the hospital and there are doctors in near me trying to look at me and my anxiety starts to go through the roof then four words come out of my mouth shut the fuck up...everyone stops talking...I let out a big sigh and ask what's going on...the doctor answers my question "you Lost a lot of blood and were trying to figure out why" oh that's all I reply...My mother expresses this worried face she says do you know how serious this is as she explains that there was no way I could have lost any blood because I didn't have a stab wound like there was nothing there to show that I could have lost any blood it was strange as I explained to my mother as I touched were I felt the pain in my neck from before, The doctors said that because they couldn't explain how I lost all the blood that lost that it wasn't important and that I was fine, so my mother signed me out as we got to the car I asked my mother where dad was she said that hes at home sleeping I went silent.....

The man just sat down in a rock and told him "What if I told you something like you were the chosen one? Would you believe me?" he asked with a smirk in his face "What if I told you, you were one of those "Hackers" in the system? Would you believe me?" he continued while Rey was getting confused and said "No, why would I believe that?" the stranger just looked at him dumbfounded and sighs "Well you see you're really one of the special people in this world." he looked at him with seriousness in his eyes. Ren was dumbfounded and was kind of relieved to hear that, he looks at the moment again, Rose was about to get squashed with a club and it was all his fault.

All I could do was to observe this White General in front of me, she was doing the dishes in a very old fashioned way. Without faucet or water pump. Washing it with another wooden cup and a barrel of fresh water taken from the nearby river. Since her armor was destroyed, Aether was now wearing the commoners' clothes. Yet, her beauty couldn't be affected by mere clothing. It was rather overwhelming.