2.1 | Vishal and Layla

Different from what you usually find her. The start is dark, and by the time you realize what's happening, you are invested in the story and the style. The author uses colorful language, which might be hard to read if it's not your first language, but very enjoyable.

I have to say that this book isn't bad at all. Like the idea of having the MC be a bit different from the usual MC's we see, in terms of race. It's a breath of fresh air. I also like how the conversations flow. The dialogue between the three friends make the book a but more lively, so that's another plus... Now for the cons... There's a lot of unnecessary info being dumped in all at once, especially in the first chapter. There are minor grammatical errors that can't be noticed easily and more than a few punctuation errors. The Way it is written in first person is also a big turn off for me (personal issue). It think the story would be better if told in third person. Overall, is till think this is a good one, as it is very comfortable to read. 4.0/5.0... 😁

Well the years start coming and they don't stop coming

"E-ego?! What do you mean?!"  Casia sounds insulted by that.

<p>However, Lee Xuiye always understood his efforts.</p>

IT is a very interesting start, The way the main character first gets his game system is interesting and I'm happy for once, that the girl isn't a complete scumbag like in most stories. The grammar is strange in places, but you can tell this is from someone who's English is their second language and it's great and still readable and enjoyable.

I think your writing is pretty good, just a couple of complaints and that is in the translation, confusing genders.  I may suggest that you get an editor to assist you. I am at chapter 12 and the story line is very good. I sincerely hope you do not decide to drop the story.

Aunque al principio era muy tedioso al leer pero desde el cuarto capitulo fue mejorando está que lo leí en un día los 58 capitulo y me quede con deseos de mas