A mildly (at best) entertaining novel. The translation quality is lacking at times and although this novel only has 19 chapters out atm, it's already getting more and more formulaic. Seriously, it's only been 19 chapters and I already know what pattern this entire novel is going to follow, it's just really boring faceslapping.This is sub par in both concept and execution, perhaps the squandering system was an idea that could work if done differently but this ain't it. Instead of a silly, comedic, refreshing novel, we've got a very stale take on what could have been a silly, comedic, refreshing novel, it's all just very sub par and uninteresting.I've only read 19 chapters and I'm already tired of this and I consider myself to be a patient reader. I'm glad I'm not too patient though since reading any more of this would just be a draining way to waste my time. 1/5
When I started reading I was a little bored to be honest, but after reading the begging I was very excited to read the next chapter after I finished the previous one. And there's so much unexpected developments (at least for me) that it keeps me reading and waiting for more. But when you switch between characters and don't say who's point of view is that it keeps me pretty confused. Thank you very much, Kami_Ada~ <3
I have to say, the concept of the author is truly amazing! I really like how the story progresses by killing someone that the MC (Akio). Love that part! Will surely read more of your novel, mate!I do have some few points to point out. The story you wrote mostly has "telling" and few "Showing". It would be awesome if you could describe Aiko's facial expression, how his heart skipped a beat after seeing his parents dead, or the pain surging from his skin. These things helps us, reader, to imagine the scene more than saying they were covered in blood.Although the informal introduction was a bit funny, in formal writing (writing a book), that technique might appear odd. I don't know if this part is a matter of perspective, but I think sticking to formalities such as telling the character from someone else (another character) or an identification card (a subtle introduction) would be preferred than saying it on the spot. Lastly, there are some dialogue tags such as "An old man was seen talking to me." might appear correct, but in a dialogue tag, it sounds confusing. A simple "An old man walked up and said." would do its job since "said" is an invisible dialogue tag. There are few dialogues such as "Can you not." Spoken by the main character might appear force. Although that might appear witty, I think something like "Are you mocking me!" might show anger and hatred towards the creature imitating his parents before they died would bring more emotions. Kudos for the author!
The story plot good. I always love this kind of plot, from a pic nobody no greatness . I love his ability to remember everything upon reading. ( I hope of that ability as well..heheh).
Solid read, nothing to complain about. Good pacing, writing quality is up to my standards and it got me hooked pretty quickly. Only thing I would ask is to upload more often.
Eu gostei muita dessa história , teve um tipo de sistema que eu nunca tinha visto. Eu apenas achei q o desenvolvimento foi um pouco rápido para o meu gosto,mas vale lembrar que essa história é única.
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