Wally Clark • Oc

Grammar and misspelled words are so bad I has to drop the book a few chapters in. The story itself is great though, it's a shame it's barely legible.

Novel is ok, quite bland story, basically just basic level up plot but interesting enough if you are bored. For while.But around c200 author just totally destroyed the story, MC gets skill to fuse with his pets, and lo and behold, this is no longer beast taming novel. MC just fights everyone in his fused state like this is some cultivator story and his beasts are just bloodlines he has. Story just lost even the hint of originality. This already happened with the pet shop story. You can't just make pet/best taming story, and then turn it into freaking hulk smash cultivation story

I have read only two chapters and already added it to my library! 😁😁 It's really amazing. I can't believe that's it is an original. WOW! 😱😱 And the length of the chapters are perfect. Neither too small nor too long, just perfect. I love it. I am also an author, writing a novel in this section by the name of, "The Journey To An Unknown Destination." And I have just started to write it. That is why I am really impressed that it's not easy to come up with an idea and then write it down so beautifully...,😊😁😁But I just love this one!!! 👍👍👍👌👌👌

Dis novel is like Slice of life/ harem/ magicI really didn't like this novel. I've tried to, believe me, I've went up to the high 200s, dropped it multiple times just to come back to see if I was wrong and was met with more disappointment. Okay so let's start with the MC. He's a guy that died and then reincarnated into the body of a degenerate, royal prince of a clan that holds a lot of power. As a character, he is handsome af, is perfect in every way, but his only "downside" is that he is not used to romantic advances so he basically becomes thicc in the head like other JP MCs. Moving onto the supporting roles, we've got a **** ton of harem characters, like a lot of them. Every girl who he meets likes him in some way, even those who hated him likes him later. As for the guys, there are only two types, those who worship the ground he walks on and those who despise him though there is only 1 that fits into this category. The rest are forgotten like 5 chapters later. What I don't like about these characters are not tell fact that they are one dimensional, they all feel different, but here's the thing, they don't feel real. Much like drama students, everyone's interactions are heavily dramatic. I mean ffs, the students are giving each other names and are taking them seriously like "The Destroyer of Clubs" or "Princess". Trust me, as a high schooler none of us got time for that. We've either got homework, midterms, finals, actual work, making sure we get to class on time, etc that we are more worried about. We ain't got time for anything. And if you still don't believe me, here, lemme give an example. So there are 2 girls who are called the "Witches". They think of themselves as above everyone else and have like a crap ton of blackmail on the other students. These two face off against the MC and get absolutely just completely destroyed. Buuuuuutttttt the MC gives em a second chance, they repent and all that. The interaction between the MC and these twins are basically "okay, that other person exists, whatever I don't got time to bother em" and then like a hundred chapters later, their grand paps calls the MC to his home to thank him and makes them all friends because the MC "can't refuse" and the twins are hoping to be able to both date him simply because there is no one else in the school that is better. If that isn't enough evidence here's another scenario. One of the girls told MC she was gonna be the artist for his game. But she didn't want anyone else to know because she is secretly an ero artist. MC agrees to keep the secret and then when he goes back to like the main girls, he talks about the progress on his game. I **** you not, one of the other girls was able to "deduce" that the two we're most likely talking about the game and since the MC was missing an artist and musician, the other girl was most likely an ero artist since she wanted to keep it a secret. ??????????????wtf?So the characters, while unique, are fake after and I really can't get into it like that.ONTO THE STORY DEVELOPMENTRight off the bat, the story development is unpredictable, but just like character design, just because it is unique doesn't make it good. The story is very -convenient- you know? Okay so here are some examples. Our MC decides to stream for shits and giggles when his FIRST AND ONLY VIEWER that shows up is HIS SISTER FROM WHEN THE PREVIOUS GUY WAS A DEGENERATE. Okay you know, like 1 in a billion chance but that's like nothing in story telling. So how about that one time that when the MC started to delve deeper into magic, one of the regular girls thought that she didn't want to be left behind and so then the school magical spirit suddenly comes outta no where and grants her a mysterious egg that will hatch or something who knows, that will give her magical powers.??????? AND THEN, TO TOP IT ALL OFF, the student body president is like the princess of another magic clan and has some decent magic power, has like the previous president as a maid, who was also a magic user. So you're telling me that BOTH OF THEM did not notice this spirit the entire time they were enrolled there? Okay, so when their clan decided to send their kid to this school, they didn't check up on it?Enough about the story development, let's go onto the world background. It's pretty good, the story gave me like an info dump multiple times but I get the gist. Only problem I had was the author limiting the world to just Japan. Its like a lot of them forget there's a whole world out there. The author has told me about magic users inside of Japan, but what about outside? Considering how small Japan is to the rest of the world, it is quite convient how Japan (had) the strongest magic user in all of history and the only place that really existed +(the clan the MC is reincarnated into is also the descendents of this guy who may also be the reincarnation of the ancestor)Overall, it really feels like cleverly hidden escapism, 10/10 would review again

The mc is unique and I can't wait for the rival "MC" and love interest/s, I'm excited for it. The trope and plot is quite refreshing. The novel is good and has potential. I love it~♡♡♡♡♡

Good book but takes to long to update, but I have no right to talk.

Constructive criticism, hope you don't take it badly. First though - I like your novel. It has enough difference from other novels of the same type, yet keeps lots of the things you would love from those novels. Fast paced, timely updates. I enjoy reading it. However, you write your story like it's a draft of the actual novel. Similar to how an author would prepare the points and events you want in a chapter before writing the actual thing. I'm not saying to write "filler" and "fluff" material just to flesh-out the chapter. I'm glad this novel does NOT do that, but you need to develop situations and events more. Practice that, then do it on this novel, and I think you'll grow as an author, and have a great novel on your hands. Lastly - I'm going to vote for your novel. I think it has massive potential

Although I haven’t read the novel I like the Manhua.