Vow To Heaven

Its a fun read, lovin the hero. The pace is fantastic, lighting fast without missing any of the good stuff, so little filler. Fights are fun, characters varied, Still in its early stages, but volume one was a 5 star read.

So... Where should I begin? The story looks interesting and I notice that the author did try describing the characters and the setting so we, readers, could imagine it. The problem with this was that the author over-described (if that's a word) both things. It made the story confusing instead of making it clear. The second thing is punctuation and grammar. There are too many run-off sentences while describing the characters. Use periods and commas. They are your friends. Also, use a grammar corrector program like Grammarly or just write your draft in MS Word so it corrects the mistakes before you post the story. Remember, good grammar can captivate the audience in this sea of stories. I do think that with a bit of polishing and editing, your story could go far.

It’s like the author read Shadow Slave and said “I can write something atleast as depressing as this, hold my beer.” Same flavor as his other works so if you like them you’ll probably like this.Great quality overall and keeps me guessing.

I stare at the kids for a bit, then glance back at Izuku. "They're planning to raid a group of quirk-kids for food since it's lunchtime." Midoriya-san startles, looking scandalous at what I've just said and panics. "What do you mean by 'raiding'?! Don't you all get enough food as it is?" I keep quiet for a while, thinking over my answer before turning my attention to the bands of kids. In a smooth voice, I speak clear and strong despite the morbid subject and saddening words leaving my pale lips.

Ofc

"Hello, Alice," she said happily.

"Why am I crying? I whispered and wiped away my tears.

Suddenly there was a cautious rap on the wooden cottage door.

<p>Kayala tidak pernah melihat keindahan seperti itu. Rambut yang menceritakan kematian hanya dari warnanya yang perak dan pucat. Rambut yang dimiliki si Ksatria berarmor tembaga yang menantangnya. Itu adalah rambut seorang gadis yang menunduk. </p>

"Tristan it is rare for you to ask me to dress up someone"

So much to do, so much to see

That‘s is a nice story in the making.It will need some editing bc of some lost words and the other normal little prob‘s, but it’s a good read nonetheless.