hey Mr author is there going to be any more updates? don't take my prey away from me it's the only enjoyment I have left... when are you going to give me another update?
The start was good until the part where he transported to the future. But things started to go downhill when he met this girl who is a CEO of his company... she was part of the one who humiliated him, throw him out of the company and did everything that could hurt his pride. It's really not something I could stand for.
Is this story made by a single author? It's more like there's a couple of authors here, taking turns doing each paragraph - with only the vaguest knowledge of what each other is doing. This means there's going to be a beauty introduced every chapter. The protagonist's parents are going to be alive the next, and supposed dead for 3 years the next chapter. Oh, his sibling also regularly changes gender and names. This batch of trial-read has been...utterly terrible.
was pretty good at the beginning then went downhill, the MC became stupidly arrogant, there were a lot of plot holes and the translator cut out some parts.
I kind get why this story has so little views even with the number of chapters.Listen man i get that you’re a newbie writer and i commend you for your work both for the writing style and the amount of chapters.,heck even the genre of world traveling is dope. But!I just started the novel and so i need to be hooked so what do you do? You introduce an extremely hateful and annoying character at the start.Then? You make the mc’s first enemy into his love interest... now i get that the second one is not necessarily bad heck even good if done right.But you just messed up her character and made it seem as if she is an ice queen then and extremely warm person then a sadist that likes to slap anyone who mentions her sister to her which is extremely ****ed to be honest as a normal human much less a man wouldn’t fucking stand by if someone slapped him for no reason but you made the mc not only not rebuke her but also just apologize to her and hug her to make her feel all better..... that made quite angry. Huff i don’t want to be too harsh to a budding writer since I understand that you’re doing you best and for that i commend you but i just shared with you what i felt from the first 40 chapters and so this would be extremely good feedback to you.I lost all desire to continue after he hugged her when she slapped him like who the **** does that? Anyway hope you all the best.
Edward began to help me walking as my body is weak now but for some reason I can feel something strange changed within me but I don't know what is it, WHAT HAPPENED TO MY BODY?
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