Cliché plots forced down your throat like the air you breathe is made out of them. MC saying that he is in a place that no one goes to cus it is absolutely useless and then after 10 hours of tiring leveling up suddenly an Assassin attacks him for no reason, assassin turns out is a strong, beautiful girl of a female guild with problems and that is where is dropped. But there are no mistakes in the grammar and all so a little plus.
I want to see more lemon moments between Arthur and older womans. Children are a little childish so please write more about older womans. Thank you very much
You have such a good premise to work on. Your idea is brilliant but your story writing lacks alot of things. Also, please dont follow the pattern of chinese authors to stack in more words and make more chapters. A shorter story would be better if it is relevant. Also, the the modern world isn't as savage as the ancient one he came from. That is all well and good if it was in an ancient chinese world, but if you are writing about the modern world, make it so that the people act like modern people do. Now we do have a lot of assholes around but there are good people around too. Killing someone isn't that common and it isn't condoned either. Also, please don't mind my criticism. This is my first time telling an author my point of view and even that is because I am absolutely in love with idea you have put forth and I wish to read something extremely good rather than something mediocre.
Author-Kun , I'll give you 1 day to get back from the hiatus if I do not go to hell behind you, until you write a 500 cap of this novel ..* cough * * cough * * (. ✿‿✿.) * ....
Oh... Well, he'll figure it out soon. But for now I have to do my part and act as the 'new, nerdy, and quiet' kind of girl. Ugh, this role disgusts me! It shows in this stupid school society that I'm weak! Hah!
The happiness that she expressed because her efforts finally bore fruit was frowned upon as arrogance. Her hardwork and the smile it illicited was viewed as conceit. Her results was deemed as undermining her sibling.
Once Yang Jiang had buckled up her seatbelt and made herself comfortable in the car, they almost immediately began to drive off to the supermarket to pick up some vegetables, food ingredients, and other items she might need to make food for the time being.
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