Alryt, nice story I must say. Your writing quality is great. You got a nice flow I give u that. But you might want to cut down your paragraphs in your second and third chapter. Cos in those chapters, you have lots of important info... So making it long, made my head ache some more with my headache. I had to focus so much or I wud av lost what the paragraph was saying. Normally a paragraph shud b btw 3-5 if I am not mistaken. Little or no typos, great book n plotline author. It shows author knows what he is doing. Added to my library, would love to see where this is going. Nice work, keep it up.
It's really slow for me personally I mean im on ch 186 and he still hasn't become a Pumpkinmancer he just recently got some necromancer stuff. Plus I'm not a fan of the NPC thing I mean Why??, why do that except to make it harder for him to earn money (sponsor/ads) and disrupt the bubblegum situation?? it's just weird for me I can't see a good point in making everyone believe he's an NPC (except maybe Comidy but it's not really funny so idk) it just made it so its not fun to read anymore
I enjoyed the novel so far. It's really worth a read. Hope u enjoy too🚀💯. Well it was great so far. I hope u continue with this story because it has potential.🤣😋😃😃🚀🤣🤣💯😂😂🚀😃🙂🤣😎☺🏅🏅😙⛲🌁🕍🌁☺😑😂😋😶🗽😶🤣💯🤣😂🚀😍🚀😅🙄😣😊😃🙄🔥🔥🙄❄❄❄❄🔥🔥❄❄🔥🔥💯🚀🚀💯🚀🚀🙄💯💯🙄🚀🙄🚀😋💯
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