THE UNBROKEN ROAD

the overall story is good but how you convey it is the problem

It looks promising, pacing can be increase more but I personally like slow story building, keeps us link to characters more. I am looking forward to reading more about Ravian story, I am more interested in him than the MC 😅

'That sounds like...'

So what's wrong with taking the back streets?

                     The younger who follows them finds them as the same people who they want to change in the school but can't . as the people were rusticated from the school of the people ,these people want to take revenge on the people and became the psycho paths of the society and kills many people ....now the 2 brothers understands the situation and want to either change them are to end them .

"Auria, honey, what are those?" Eve asks uncertainly

So they went to Will knowing that Kaye and Kate are watching. They talked, touched and playfully hit Will, they noticed Kaye's expression suddenly turned foul while Kate's expression didn't change, which waas a very enjoyable smile.

Effect 3 (Passive). Gives wearer the ability to breathe underwater and enhances swimming abilities.