You need to improve your grammar as it really ruins the story. The character is way too open with his abilities and your transitions aren't the smoothest. The story is alright but you should probably lay out more information about the current world the MC lives in.
there's not much to go on right this second but it's got the groundwork to be something better than a lot of other things I've read so I can't wait to see where you go from here
Muito bom a novel recomendo à todos a acompanhar não vão se arrepender. ....................................................................................😎
Hey guys, I decided to write another review. Well, the book didn't live up to expectations like I expected in it's first 3 months. I'm at fault for that, I dragged the system reveal for far too long and for that I'm sorry. Ok, here's the proper reviewWriting Quality: It's not perfect but I tried my best to make it as smooth as possible Story Development: I think I at least did above average in this aspect, I paid a lot of attention to the story, storyline, and power ranking before starting it.Character Design: Not perfect but I tried to make each character as unique as possible.Updating Stability: Pretty stable, as of now, 16 chapters per week.World Background: I tried my best to make it not too complicated while still trying hard to restrain myself from hitting.Well, that's my review. No matter what though, deciding to read this book is your choice, I hope you do though and as for my readers, thanks for reading.
DISGUSTING________________________________________________________________________________________________________Cover sucks change it- looks like a kidd leaving from his kindergarden.. make it like he is hoping for something- a a little dark one with one light...
Good novel!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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