The Soul Weaver

bisa jadi.... karena wajahnya ehm.... tampan dan menarik. Aku jadi senyum2 melihat fotonya...

At night, the campus was dark with few lighting. Few classrooms still had lights on, with students and teacher having a night class. In a dark classroom, four shadows were holding game consoles.

"Ayo.....".dengan Tangan Kanan Kanya yang digenggam oleh Tyo berusaha mengajak Kanya Menuju lokasi yang disebutkan Tyo ditelepon.

Great story so far, excited to see where it goes. It offers a fresher approach to a Naruto Fan-Fiction by taking place a bit disconnected from the main story in both location and age. Some critiques would be the flipping of gender pronouns for certain characters in the beginning which can be a bit disorientating and the pacing can seem a bit on the slower side without a sense of direction for a bit.Praises would be the focus on building the main characters emotions and fleshing out the supporting cast for him.Recommendations for the author would be to draw inspiration from the original source material through side-films and filler episodes, rereview some of the earlier chapter to correct grammar and pronoun mistakes.

Very fun read could do with some more substance, sometimes the story fast tracks events like his business which I thick could have more detail,Good stuff Keep it going! 🙏🙏🙏