The Guide of Evolution

Although I wouldn't say it was the finest novel I've ever read, it was still rather good considering it was your first. The noises were the only thing that bothered me; yes, I realize that you repeated them to let the reader comprehend that they were sounds. I thought some of the laughter was inappropriate, though it may have just been "ha ha" or "haha." Some noises also were. The ticks rather than repeat could of be "the tick repeated over and over again." rathe than tick tick tick tick.

I read quite a few chapters to come here and write a review. There are a few places where the sounds and the grammar sometimes disturb the flow of reading, other than that, I think this novel is going pretty well.
Update consistently and I think this novel has the potential to become something great in the future.

The story is good. I like how he calls himself king, when he obviously isn't all there is right now XD
The writing could use some work. Maybe get editing software? There are free ones. But story-wise, this is solid material. I'm adding it to my library :)
Keep doing the good work :)

on the first chapter...there are some mistakes in punctuation that causes confusion in understanding the sentences .. however the story seems to be promising....so I'll give 5 stars (◕ᴗ◕✿)

Good story well structured writing  hope see more of you keep writing people will love it

Ehem this is the bestest book you'll read i promise

You know its gonna be funny its gonna be heart breaking you'll even understand the meaning of life here

This is my fist book but not the last enjoy this

You have such a great story going. I'm enjoying the build ups and character development. Keep up the good work, but I do encourage you to go back and make some edits for the weird Grammar and "Where's your capitalization?" freaks.

It's actually pretty great and I stumbled upon this book a few days ago good luck on your story because it really has a lot of potential. I Love your work and really recommend it