It had very good story line and stable world building. Although there are some parts which are quite illogical but hey fantasy men throw away your logic and don’t torture yourself just enjoy it all I want to ask author is just why my cat girls and wolf girls and tiger girls were called orc? Is it because orc ancestors are pigs so you lump them together?
Intresting story. I hope it will stay like that in later chapters. I think it would have been better if you used china names like Yi Xiao Yun Feng Zhao Chu Che Lin Ling and other. I just read so many china novels its wierd to see different names.Will MC keep his ruthlessnes from his past life?I dont want him to be soft hearthed.
Very Interesting, this story makes readers can imagine quite well. Continue your work, I'll still be waiting for the continuation of this story.Characters inside this story are quite strong
author I just realised something you can try to improve on or maybe you have in later chapters since in currently at 260+. The sentences or rather the way the characters speak is too formal, sometimes it feels cringy and automated, no one speaks the way they do with so many words, the way to speak and the wordings don't feel natural. I'm very adept at English (even though I know it' may not be your first language) and the conversations feel like I'm reading a Shakespeare book most times. for example in chap 278 when Alex finds out about artemias plan to use him, what he says in reply to her question was honestly just too long with so many unnecessary words in between, it's even worse for artemias reply. You should try making the way they speak more natural, using common informal English lingo and having less words while still passing the message across. Just think about contemporary English (American/British) movies and series and ask your self, if these lines were to be acted out , would they sound off to a listener/watcher or would they sound so smooth it wouldn't even look like acting, would anyone speak this way casually with so many tedious words?. I think that'll help.
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