The Bomb’s Heart

This story has interesting concepts but, the grammar is really atrocious. There are other stories on this site that are even worse then this, however, I'm not going to be nice because of this. I understand that some people keep saying in the comments that the writing quality gets better at ch 18 or around ch 32. In the end I could not drag my self across the floor to reach such chapters.One of the main points I don't understand about the author is why if he has an editor already, just ask him to redo all your previous chapters. The author is dragging away potential readers due to not editing his starting chapters.Point 2. I feel like I'm reading a children's book due to all the sound effects. These sound effects take away from a story unless a child is reading them because most children don't know what most stuff sound like. That is why most children's books have the cow goes "moo" or the sheep goes "baa". It gives kids a 3 in 1 training. Training their vocals, reading comprehension and their understanding of what stuff sounds like.Point 2b. As an ***** with the understanding of the English language and sounds. I feel offended when I see a written sound effect. I know what a sword sound makes when it hits something with different densities. It just irks me because its like the author is saying "This is what it sound like to me and you should believe me." No... I don't believe sirens go "siren...siren" or swords go "slice" like their talking. Even the sound effects are off putting.Point 3: The cultivation is strange. I understand that being Original in concept is what authors should do. However, the cultivation with the steam punk vib (engine) and cultivation just don't mix well. I like the part about the soul-bonding, but, it could have been better executed.Point 4: The animals are puppets as far as I can tell. The start of the novel it shows the personality of the creatures and that was a good start, however, right as the soul binding was completed It was like the creatures them selves don't have their own thoughts anymore. It is more along the line as the people turn them into puppets then project their emotions into their soul-bonded puppet to be more like the host.Point 5: The MC does not have a solid goal. Yes, he wants to be in that championship thing but that does not make him insane about doing the most efficient cultivation training which most people fail at. The reason I do not believe this is due to the fact he lived a very normal life with his family. No sane person would tarnish such a thing. If the story showed he had a desire to be recognized due to certain bad pasts then I would believe it more.There are other points I could point out. But I don't know if the author can even read English so adding anymore would just be a waste of time for me and the reader of this wall of text.

It’s a good book, but the grammar puts me off a bit. The MC is a Gary sue (super handsome, genius, fighting expert)  and is contradictory so that’s kinda bad. I still like it, and would continue to read it if it got proofread.

I love cliffhangers and thrills but from all the cliffhangers here, this one is the one I am most disappointed with. So disappointed. Very disappointed. If I could write the word DISAPPOINTED a thousand times then I would but that's pointless. 😡There's no question with regards to their mission but hanging the storyline there...huh

It's unlikely you'll find a story that follows a similar line to this. I would say that this story is the leader of already strong protagonist stories like [I'm the MC Why Do I Suck at Cultivation] and [Reincarnated As A Baby? My Cry Is A Dragon Roar!], also from stories like [It Turns Out I am a Dao Ancestor] and [Invincible Uncle-Grandmaster]I felt not simple philosophies and thoughts in this story, I don't remember if this is part of the story or my imagination did it (I believe my imagination), but because of that this story is the top, remembering that Top Tier Providence wasn't even mentioned even though have some better details, these 'quick and not complex' stories I focus on other things to define what is good or bad

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Writing quality is pretty okay. Updates are stable. The story has a decent pace and isn't a 70 chapter tournament arc thing. The Mc has a okay development but it doesn't get described that much. The world is, till now, a pretty average cultivation world. The author could read more paragraph comments and fix his mistakes that are pointed out.

i love the uniqueness of MC and Pet , amazing writing style for me ,i am waiting for milk ,Thank You Lol.............................................

MC's extreme distrust is getting on my nerves so much I want to kill him, he's putting off everything even strength just because he doesn't trust system. bro you will die first before the system does anything to you if you keep on being so dumb. Secondly, interactions with characters arent really logical, it seems quite forced. they don't really think into things. Harold is too cowardly for the first half, but good thing he still tried to save his wife. Thirdly, too much fights and all of them are very long, I'm now around 30 chapters and the whole thing is just fighting and nothing else, even adventure is very short and plain, no relaxation at all, it's as if I'm watching a 10 hours long Naruto fights compilation. we can't be so tense the whole few hundred chapters, that's not novel, that's torture.Fourthly, MC is too bloodthirsty and doesn't think about using terrains to fight, he also attacks someone that he knows could kill him without even talking it out, just say that you want to end things peacefully, u haven't even killed anyone from each side yet.Fifthly, some forced plots are too obvious, should think of lengthening the plot and adding more points instead of directly going into it and forcing everything.sixth, this is just my preference. it's fine if you want to add mystery and all that, but at least let us know basic things gradually and not just put fights without going into mysteries.