All around this story is average. It's a cultivation novel with typical cliches and a few typical features, but I haven't seen anything new yet. Sometimes that's good, because you just want to have an enjoyable read, and indeed some people love how "fast paced" the novel is, but not me.The grammar is near flawless but the author's command of the English language is lacking. Moments seem to drag on forever and the writing seems to circle itself in a repetitive manner. These things happen mostly due to a bland, unvarried word choice. For readers like me, with higher expectations, I'm simply bored from reading it.Plot-wise the story is average too. The world building doesnt seem very deep and there aren't very many characters, as if the author doesnt want to put the work in to making a large world. The time period and cultures aren't established (with either the use of objects, technology, or references). Nothing.Furthermore the magic system is lacking. Even by chapter 30, when the MC has broken through two planes, I still dont know what the planes are, what the consequences of cultivating improperly are, what the elements are, or how the elements are used (in combat) ect. Even by chapter 30 there has been only one fight and it was totally lackluster. Missed opportunity for demonstrating the magic system in action.Over all I would say average. I am still very impressed with the grammar, but there's unfortunately no character or charm to the writing. So even though it isn't distracting from the story, it is still detracting. Author should go back to rework scenes and actively use synonyms. Every adjective in a chapter should be unique. Every verb should be specifically chosen to best describe an action.
Honoria coming in as a potential lover in his harem just really disturbed me and brought back some uncomfortable memories about a manga with an idiotic MC that only knew how to think with his wang. I love the story, war and kingdom building but adela and linde are already quite perfect, Honoria's just feels forced all because the author prpbably just wanted more women. Adela being underaged gave me enough interest to keep on reading until finally berengar and she can have a family. Now this random spoiled and naive chick out of nowhere just barges in and apparently berengar starts to fall for her. Honoria would've been more interesting if berengar acted like a manipulative charmer and used her to forge a somewhat good but strained relationship with the byzantine empire while actually holding no feelings for the woman. But no, author just had to go with "I started to fall for her" and all their early interactionsand flirtings just seem like a forced entry for a 3rd woman which just makes me cringe in annoyance.once again i love the story but just screw honoria. Only way i can find her presence in the novel tolerable is if berengar is actually just manipulating her this whole without any feelings but sadly i dont see that happening so i can only hope honoria doesnt singlehandedly become the reason i drop this wonderful work
This novel must have been written by the 12 year old son of the owner of Qidian or something. Otherwise it is beyond me how it could reach rank 1. Everything within this story barely scratches the surface. Ability? Family? World building? Main character? Friends and Love Interest? Each of those barely get half a sentence in passing, before we move on to the next clichee.
It's awesome work, in love with the characters and concept! it's incredible to see such a tremendous writer! Love the synopsis and the chapters too! keep up the good work, author!
even though it has markers of the general genre of transmigration, it has a bit of flavour of its own, broadens the genre in its own way. the character and story fit very well , nicely paced development that a reader can follow
Well, I deleted my previous review because of two important things. My update schedule will be every day at 20:30 GMT+7 until further notice.The second point is that I didn't give my novel 5 stars and that is blasphemy, Why did you just think I'm shameless? I'm not, I totally didn't feel envious of all the other authors that do the same. Finally, I'm writing this novel for fun (at least currently)! Moreover, it is my first time writing anything. If that was not enough, English is not my first language. But don't worry! I'm using two different grammar correcting software! So, it shouldn't be bad, I hope you don't leave because of this. I hope I didn't forget anything... I actually did! Any questions or suggestions about the novel write below. I will answer all of them unless they are nonsense of course. And please refrain from using swear words. If you don't like something about my novel, tell me normally. I only have the outline of the plot and some stacked chapters so changing things is possible!
I’m up to ch 441. Overall if you are looking for something laid back with not much going on this is the book for you. Mc is overly cautious and while he makes mistakes he does what he can to not make the same mistakes again. My gripes about the story is author will say the same thing 2-3 times back to back sometimes to pad the word count. It’s also said every time mc does research on side occupations that it’s okay because he has all the time in the world to learn anything he wants and practice anything he wants. All the while his cultivation speed is just as fast or faster than people around him… so really his immortality means nothing so far. That stuff aside I do enjoy the story.
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