SUPREME HAREM OF MILFS

Author's notes:No heartbreaking or encouraging descriptions for this work. I'm confident that if you'll give it a try, it will satisfy you.I'll post 2 chapters/day, unless unexpected events and I'll give it my all everyday to write and edit chapters, making them enjoyable to read.Needless to say, I hope you guys will support my work through the WSA, voting for it and helping it climb the ranks.Constructive comments and reviews will always be appreciated.Have a talk with me via my social profiles (links at the end of the synopsis).

Fake reviews by evil immortal makes this pop up at 5 stars when this novel isnt 1 star for you until you learn to lose the fake and the story aint even that good so much bs

As I wish to deliver on the request of being entirely brutally honest, I must say that this review may appear rather negative. I focused mainly on what - in my best opinion- has the most need or potential for improvement (in the hope to help you progress rather than simply sing you praise).The very start of your story has the potential to be immersive, but fails to grasp my attention. I think this is due to the fact that there is an absence of rhythm in your writing, something I noticed as well further throughout the rest of your work.The characters feel sympathetic but I fail to imagine them. They appear to be cut out of cardboard and don’t feel like actual people. You have given me some idea on how they look but I would like to know more about the way they stand, their posture, their bearing.I want to see more personality. Give me some originality. Give me some flaws! Dimples, scars, dry lips. Do they pick their nails? Play with their sleeves? Show me peculiar character details. Any particular violence, abruptness or charm in the way they move? A particular way they move their eyebrows? Do they make exaggerated hand motions when they talk? Nonchalant scratching? Do they look away at some points during discussions? Do their smiles reach their eyes?As your reader, these things tell me a lot more about the characters than the colour of their hair. I wish for texture, intensity and sensation.The dialogue is fairly woody; it sounds forced and not quite genuine. As for the romance; it is a bit entertaining, but it does not thoroughly convince me and the ‘chemistry’ seems obligatory. I am not especially rooting for the relationship, although as a reader I need to get a secondhand infatuation with the love interest.The overall quality of your grammar is rather poor, but not as poor as other works on webnovel. I do appreciate that you clearly put a lot of effort in your work. I applaud your enthusiasm and sincerely hope that my harshness did not dissuade you from continuing.

Interesting premise. Decent story. Places a lot of focus on comedy and face slapping than actual plot and development. I've given that a pass as of now because he's so weak. Usually, the plot and character development don't take place till he gets some actual strength in the world with these sect systems but I don't feel invested enough in the character or the things he finds himself in. Dull and feels like a drag to keep reading.

What an interesting story, the pace of the chapters are also good, we just need more chapters... Advice to the author, you can try reading some other author's stories, you could gain more ideas.

Hey guys, Author here. I just wanted to leave a few words regarding this story of mine:First and foremost, the book is inspired by The Beginning After the End by Turtleme. This beginning of this story mirrors TBATE, and if you've read the work, then you'll immediately recognize the plots and situations. Both stories obviously diverge later on, but you can expect the first few dozen chapters to be extremely similar.I'm also trying to improve my writing with this book. I'd say I did a decent job at checking for mistakes, but if you happen to find any, or just happen to read a sentence that doesn't sound right, just let me know. I always try and correct mistakes I missed.Pacing is also something I struggle with, so any tips on how to go about adjusting and setting the speed of events would be much appreciated.Here are also some questions I've gotten:Is this story a harem?- No. Is there R-18 content?- No.Is the story perfect?- Fuck no.Obviously, the last one isn't a question I've gotten, but please don't start reading this story expecting some modern masterpiece. I'm just a simple author who's trying to write their very first novel.That's all I've got for now. I really do hope you enjoy my story if you decide to try it out. If you have any questions, just ask away or ask me on discord. (Link will be in the synopsis of the story)Thanks for everything :)

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Her boy jolted at the sudden sight, only then coming to realize she was laying in her young miss's lap of all places!