overall decent but needs patience as it is a bit of a slow burner. nice work author, i can tell you put a lot of effort into it. the pacing is a bit slow to my liking, a lot of dialogue and internal confusion going on, but the writing is good and up to chapter three i was entertained. would recommend!
The prose of this work is phenomenal, and very uncommon in Webnovel because of how much its dominated by 'fastfood novels' that are catered for people who prefer fast-paced easy-to-read books. If you're a fan of this slowburn, intricate writing style, I highly recommend checking this out. I really like the steampunk vibe going on, with the setting being post-Industrial era and all the fascinations for magicians and illusionists. Lumiere is also an interesting main character because he's a bit more contemplative than most MCs in ML novels. It's interesting to see his inner conflicts and relationships with other characters.Overall, it's a very unique read and I recommend checking it out!
The standout feature of this novel is undoubtedly its writing style. The author has a talent for crafting intricate sentences that captivate the reader. While the initial pacing may be a bit slow, the story gradually evolves into an engaging and enjoyable read. Another highlight of the novel is the protagonist, who sets himself apart from the typical fantasy main characters by displaying a rare sense of self-awareness often absent in other novels of the genre.
In the beginning it was church now it jump to exploring the universe which then leads to a crowd of side characters gathered together, the MC isn't really introduced all that much, the only thing we know is his name
A beauty introduced into first chapter but its not a "jade" beauty along with a lot of inspiration from other works
it can engage a reader who isn't all that curious and want to waste time. Even the outlines of bolding words, exclamation points (!) actually feel like we're inside the author creation.
Although the mona building isn't really describe how big it is until a few chapters later.
I would say as someone who spent the first few chapters reading it can really engage you to a world of likable fantasy.
Some scenes like magician ones could using clapping to draw attention of the background character in front of them or those around them when they're yelling/scolding others for mistakes
However in chapter two there is 2 random bolded texts that were suppose to be inaudible, what is this about?
In chapter 3, romance is in the works. This kind of engages more plotline depends on how you view/build it
I like how you introduced assassins who hide with cloaks on.
I get your trying to switch povs a lot, I think labeling that pov from side pov to MC pov may be a good idea to not confuse readers
Other than the first few chapters in, you are doing well so for on your novel.
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A beauty introduced into first chapter but its not a "jade" beauty along with a lot of inspiration from other works
it can engage a reader who isn't all that curious and want to waste time. Even the outlines of bolding words, exclamation points (!) actually feel like we're inside the author creation.
Although the mona building isn't really describe how big it is until a few chapters later.
I would say as someone who spent the first few chapters reading it can really engage you to a world of likable fantasy.
Some scenes like magician ones could using clapping to draw attention of the background character in front of them or those around them when they're yelling/scolding others for mistakes
However in chapter two there is 2 random bolded texts that were suppose to be inaudible, what is this about?
In chapter 3, romance is in the works. This kind of engages more plotline depends on how you view/build it
I like how you introduced assassins who hide with cloaks on.
I get your trying to switch povs a lot, I think labeling that pov from side pov to MC pov may be a good idea to not confuse readers
Other than the first few chapters in, you are doing well so for on your novel.