Story is actually written very well as in grammar, flow and characters, plot when considered individually. But big problem is how mc and plot connects, or should I say doesn't connect. Mc just doesn't have much agency and there's not much internal motivations in story form mc to do what he does. It seems like author develops some interesting plot, and then mc is made to flow trough that plot like puppet, mc just doesn't seem to have agency. There's also the problem of mc being constantly bailed out by his ring when stuff gets even slightly hard, it's always some magical thing that bails him out, not his own intellect, skill or perseverance. This again reduces mc's agency, it's just very lame. It would not matter if it was just sometimes, but both of this things happen constantly. Good example is whole thing happening in mc's village, he was already ready to go, he didn't have any reason to stay, no friends or family, no lure of great rewards, and again he was planning to leave. But then author made the plot happen, which I do agree is great when considered in isolation, but mc just started to participate in solving this mystery and helping around and we have absolutely no idea why, and there's no internal reason in story that tells us why. He just does like some zombie because the plot is there so obviously he should somehow participate in it.He even wanted to see Lord of Hei dudes, but again, there was just no reason for that, he just wanted to because story required him to. There was no mention of potential rewards or anything that would help mc, if anything seeing mysterious strong person is just an huge threat.I would really like to give this better review, but I just can't because story till 150 has been mostly just about boat(mc) being pushed around by waves, and every time boat is about to crash into huge rock, another wave just comes in and pushes the boat to the side. I would like that boat to have some oars, sails and actual person directing it.
No good..feng lei is better than him.. Feng lei should just be the mc, wat a irritating author.... waste of time....................................... ................................
This novel is truly a breath of fresh air. It combines a real cultivation world and a virtual one interestingly. A hidden gem in my opinion. I hope more people could review and vote for this great novel ;) Keep up the good work author!
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In at least every other sentence is an error. I‘m not a nativ speaker so I don’t mind some errors every so often. BUT if even the titles of the chapters have so many grammatical mistakes as they do, you can imagine the quality of the content.Sadly that is not its only flaw. In the first 30 chapters there are already gaping plot holes and the author keeps repeatedly contradicting himself.The setting had a lot of potential but it was unfortunately wasted.
This is, without a doubt, the best novel on this website. This novel is like a lighthouse that stands tall in a sea of endless mediocre works. Its light guides the way for readers like me to know what true art is like. When I read the first chapter, I had to close my phone and just think about life for a moment. That was how much this book impacted me. I had to stop my trembling hand from reaching for my wallet to give my life savings to the author. Despair, joy, defeat, success - this novel captures the essence of the human condition so well it's almost frightening. This book will truly be one of the next greats, remembered and taught in classrooms in the future.
Author really went and accidentally made the mc too op so he nerfed him. This was at like chapter 5 as well. Got some cheat powers only to get taken away a second later because the author doesn't know how to write. Like if you gonna regret making the character too op then at least nerf him in a way that is acceptable. You take away his skills, the girls he coincidentally killed are some young masters, and worst of all he's not used to killing again even though he was literally torturing the girls earlier.
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